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The apostrophe should be in train, not whistle.Vishnu Priya B wrote: ↑22 May 2021, 12:38 "The train whistle’s scream pierced through the silent night's cold air."
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Who else thinks the sentence structure is a bit off?
That's what sounds right to me.
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Yup. Exactly!Yj_Besoy wrote: ↑25 May 2021, 18:10The apostrophe should be in train, not whistle.Vishnu Priya B wrote: ↑22 May 2021, 12:38 "The train whistle’s scream pierced through the silent night's cold air."
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Who else thinks the sentence structure is a bit off?
That's what sounds right to me.
And how about this:
The train's whistle screamed through the cold and silent night.
(This is my version)
The problem is the whole book was littered with awkward sentences like this and worse. It was a difficult read, though.
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