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Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 10 Nov 2016, 01:05
by gali
What do you think about the pace of the book? I am halfway through and though I enjoy it, I find it slow-paced. There is no real sense of suspense really. The focus is more on world-building and lore and less on the action itself, not necessarily a bad thing. The way the author weaves together all trands of folklore is impressive. The book is well written and enjoyable, but I found a few cases of misplaced apostrophes.

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 11 Nov 2016, 11:27
by Rachaelamb1
It is an interesting book, but like you said, a little slow.

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 11 Nov 2016, 20:08
by ebeth
It is slow. I finally got through over half the book. I must admit that even though it is interesting there are times where I found myself speed reading through some of the areas, but I think it's because some places tend to drag a bit. It may be more like finding myself trying to get through a part that is dragging a bit faster so I can get to a part of the book that I enjoy. The author still did a good job with the story.

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 11 Nov 2016, 23:38
by gali
I agree. I think the author could have tightened some portions of the tale.

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 13 Nov 2016, 10:34
by Janetleighgreen
The storyline is good, the pace is too slow. I found some errors throughout as well, but nothing too serious. I think the style threw me off a little at times, the dialogue felt choppy. I feel, not being from that area myself, I may not know the speech is indigenous to the area? I don't know, it just felt funny to me. I think that given this is a series, a lot of stuff could have been carried over to make this book shorter. It felt as if the author was trying to get everything out in this first book. Overall, I did like the story and will more than likely read on if the series progresses.

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 13 Nov 2016, 14:03
by gali
Janetleighgreen wrote:The storyline is good, the pace is too slow. I found some errors throughout as well, but nothing too serious. I think the style threw me off a little at times, the dialogue felt choppy. I feel, not being from that area myself, I may not know the speech is indigenous to the area? I don't know, it just felt funny to me. I think that given this is a series, a lot of stuff could have been carried over to make this book shorter. It felt as if the author was trying to get everything out in this first book. Overall, I did like the story and will more than likely read on if the series progresses.
I totally agree. I liked the style of writing, but like you felt that the book was overburdened with info and could be tightened up some.

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 14 Nov 2016, 23:59
by Aohanlon86
I find the storyline good but finding it slow to read.

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 15 Nov 2016, 05:51
by gali
Amcdanel86 wrote:I find the storyline good but finding it slow to read.
The storyline starts to move forward after the second half of the book.

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 15 Nov 2016, 05:58
by Aohanlon86
gali wrote:
Amcdanel86 wrote:I find the storyline good but finding it slow to read.
The storyline starts to move forward after the second half of the book.
I haven't gotten that far yet

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 15 Nov 2016, 19:53
by Seamusberen1955
Seamusberen the author or ROAN here. For those who found it slow could you give me some feedback and tell me why. About the language used, yeah, it is indigenous to southwest Wisconsin. I grew up there and people from everywhere else constantly laugh at the funny way I talk.

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 15 Nov 2016, 20:27
by Janetleighgreen
Seamusberen1955 wrote:Seamusberen the author or ROAN here. For those who found it slow could you give me some feedback and tell me why. About the language used, yeah, it is indigenous to southwest Wisconsin. I grew up there and people from everywhere else constantly laugh at the funny way I talk.
Hello! I am so happy you are on here talking with us!

I think the biggest issue for me was the wealth of information that slowed the pace. This is an amazing story and the characters are good; but I got bogged down in the details. Trust me, as an author myself I understand the need to create a sense of feeling and atmosphere, and you are brilliant at doing that. I have the opposite problem; there isn't enough in my book, and I am working diligently to fix that. Too much telling and not enough showing. Your book has helped me tremendously, so thank you!

It's not about me this month, so back to you; I would say to take some of the repetitive information out and that will help tighten it up.

You have the story, you have great characters, just pull out some of the fluff and think in terms of series and not saga. You can keep the story going with a series without putting everything in one book.

I hope this helps. I know how hard it is to hear some of this stuff. My comments are from a place of support. You are a great writer.

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 15 Nov 2016, 22:40
by gali
I agree with the above post.I agree. There was too much repetitive information that dragged the pace down and not enough action. Otherwise, it was a great story.

Thank you for commenting. :)

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 16 Nov 2016, 02:18
by Gnome
According to my app I'm 24% in and finally feel like I can add to this thread.

I mentioned in the thread about the beginning that the pace felt very uneven. As the story is taking hold I feel the pace has evened out appropriately. Parts of the story still feel slow but appropriately so.

Now that the author has joined our discussion and is giving some insight to the inspiration, I'm starting to wonder how the book would work as a serial with a few chapter released at a time. It certainly would help with the repeated information. I came across an author a few months ago who offered her romance novels in a subscription service (I can't remember her name and don't know if I've saved her book at all). Each week she released a few chapters then a few months after the book was finished she released everything in an ebook (which is how I found her originally).

I am having a bit of a problem with dialogue, it's too pretty. It feels like the teenagers weren't written with a teenaged voice (and it is super hard to write for someone who sits outside of your own demographic). So far it feels like Beth and Jace are too "perfect." There's no petty teenaged conflict or worrying about homework/college/parental pressure. Teenager #1 is needed and steps in and out of Conner's day like he's changing shoes.

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 16 Nov 2016, 09:29
by MarisaRose
Other than the beginning and ending of the novel I would agree that this novel is slow going. However, I do really enjoy the author's writing style. I didn't find the writing to be choppy or unnatural at all, in fact, I found the opposite. I think it is her writing style that kept me going through the book. I think the novel is slow paced because the author is doing a lot of world building and set up for the ongoing series.

Re: Pacing and style of writing

Posted: 16 Nov 2016, 10:30
by Joy Boudreau
I thought the pacing was nice. Yes, it could be improved - there is some repetitive information given, but the slowness in pace, I believe is due to the mysteries that are not quickly solved and secrets that are not easily revealed. The reader is not given a lot more information than Conor is given, and remember he is basically thrust as a key player in this world without his having known that there was even anything different about him.