What do you think The Face of Fear could of done better?

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Post by Susmita Biswas »

No, I think this is the best one.
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I think The Face of Fear could have included sex scenes between Paul and Rachelle earlier on in the book. I say this because it was annoying to watch them continue rejecting each other until the very last page, when it was clear that they were in love with each other.
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I suggest changing the cover of the book, because the cover is very similar to scream, the cover of The Face of Fear must be really scary, according to the title.
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I feel that the author should spend a fair bit of time proofreading and editing the book. There were many grammatical errors and poor sentence structure. Proses could have been done better and better dialogue reformation can be put in place
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Post by SangeethaNarayan »

I agree with most of what others are saying about this. There was just way too much description in the book .... A lot of telling and very little showing. And the way the perspectives kept switching without adequate warning just made me dizzy. A thorough developmental and structural editing, and maybe change the cover of the book?
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I think the editing could have been a lot better as I found several grammatical errors in it.
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I have this title on my TBR list and I'm grateful to have found this forum. I can go in with my eyes wide open and prepared in advance for the challenges!
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Valerie2005 wrote: 20 Dec 2018, 11:50 The book overall was great but every book has those few things where you just wish they could of done something different or added something to make it better, what do you think?
I think better editing should have been done. And the book is too wordy, too much details. Some lengthy explanations and details should have removed or minimized.
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Definitely. More editing and taking out irrelevant information would make it much better. And given all the grammatical errors, I would say use a different editor next time!
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Well, first of all, the cover could have been far less kitschy and cheesy. It makes one want to roll their eyes more than invest in the story.
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Post by Helen91 »

I'm sure the author put his best into this work but I will recommend a professional editing and a little withholding of unnecessary details to bring this awesome book to perfection.
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Post by Moneybag »

Aside a more careful editing , I dont think there is anything wrong with this book.
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Post by Agbata precious »

The book wanst bad, but the author should improve in terms of paragraphs.
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Post by Favy Moses »

I agree that the book would use more editing and also with the abrupt change of plot aside this I consider this book great.
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