Did the author overuse emboldened subtitles in chapters?

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Did the author overuse emboldened subtitles in chapters?

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From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
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They didn’t bother me, but I could see how they might bother others. I just saw most of them as clarifying where the scene took place or the time, but others felt unnecessary. I don’t think they added to the story all that much.
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maggi3 wrote: 01 Jun 2019, 13:08 They didn’t bother me, but I could see how they might bother others. I just saw most of them as clarifying where the scene took place or the time, but others felt unnecessary. I don’t think they added to the story all that much.
They felt redundant to the flow of the story and my mind has always been wired to note emboldened words so I was forced to stop reading a few yoo many times.
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They got me to stop every now and then and did interrupt the flow of the story quite a few times.
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Ruba Abu Ali wrote: 02 Jun 2019, 03:39 They got me to stop every now and then and did interrupt the flow of the story quite a few times.
I completely agree with you. The book would have definitely flowed smoothly without them.
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Ferdinand_otieno wrote: 01 Jun 2019, 08:54 From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
I completely agree with you! I think the sentences that were bold were off-putting and gave too much away. Especially the one titled Baby Blues.
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I didn't really notice the bold titles at first but once I did I felt they were out of place. I'm not a big fan of subtitles in the first place. To me if a book is written well enough they should not need them, unless the book keeps jumping settings or back and forth between the future and the past.
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Stephanie Elizabeth wrote: 02 Jun 2019, 07:44
Ferdinand_otieno wrote: 01 Jun 2019, 08:54 From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
I completely agree with you! I think the sentences that were bold were off-putting and gave too much away. Especially the one titled Baby Blues.
I agree Baby Blues was too much of a giveaway.
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heatherashley7 wrote: 02 Jun 2019, 15:54 I didn't really notice the bold titles at first but once I did I felt they were out of place. I'm not a big fan of subtitles in the first place. To me if a book is written well enough they should not need them, unless the book keeps jumping settings or back and forth between the future and the past.
Yeah, thanks. That is the only viable use of that amount of emboldened subtitles; to mention a change in setting or a change in narration.
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The one you cited was so annoying to me. It came up, and I wondered why. Was it to help me skip that part? If so, then why was it in the book? I’m not used to seeing that in the middle of a story, and really, it took me right out of the plot. It was like a commercial in the middle of a movie. It seemed totally unnecessary.
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cpru68 wrote: 03 Jun 2019, 01:55 The one you cited was so annoying to me. It came up, and I wondered why. Was it to help me skip that part? If so, then why was it in the book? I’m not used to seeing that in the middle of a story, and really, it took me right out of the plot. It was like a commercial in the middle of a movie. It seemed totally unnecessary.
Exactly, like a commercial in the middle of an interesting movie.
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cpru68 wrote: 03 Jun 2019, 01:55 The one you cited was so annoying to me. It came up, and I wondered why. Was it to help me skip that part? If so, then why was it in the book? I’m not used to seeing that in the middle of a story, and really, it took me right out of the plot. It was like a commercial in the middle of a movie. It seemed totally unnecessary.
I felt the same way, that they were unnecessary. The book would still be good without them.
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I didnt think to much about it. After i realised it happened frequently i tried to ignore the bold.
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Renee_Prior1995 wrote: 03 Jun 2019, 23:47 I didnt think to much about it. After i realised it happened frequently i tried to ignore the bold.
But it was so much of an inconvenience that you had to try to ignore them.
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Ferdinand_otieno wrote: 01 Jun 2019, 08:54 From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
Yes! That was the first one that gave me pause. The subtitles definitely change the flow of the story, and, more often than not, they did not enhance the story. I think the author could have omitted the subtitles and let the story tell itself.
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