What changes you would make in the book, if you were the author?
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What changes you would make in the book, if you were the author?
I thought the book was alright, unlike most. However, even though I didn't think it was bad, there were a lot of things I would have changed in the book, say if I was the author. The main things that I would change in this book is 1) add a backstory, or flashback of the events that happened in the previous books and 2) Make Cynthia a much more smarter character lol.
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Agreed! I especially agree with having more of a history on each character provided. I almost felt as if I had chosen the second or third book of a series and hadn't read the first one. The story confused me right from the get-go. I would also make the main characters smarter!Jo689 wrote: ↑07 Jun 2019, 08:17 I was actually thinking about this:
I thought the book was alright, unlike most. However, even though I didn't think it was bad, there were a lot of things I would have changed in the book, say if I was the author. The main things that I would change in this book is 1) add a backstory, or flashback of the events that happened in the previous books and 2) Make Cynthia a much more smarter character lol.
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Thanks again for raising this discussion!
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I agree, the book was alright. To me, it seemed like it was two books: the spy thriller and the romance novel. It didn't do well as either one. Perhaps if the author picked one to concentrate on it would've turned out better?Jo689 wrote: ↑07 Jun 2019, 08:17 I was actually thinking about this:
I thought the book was alright, unlike most. However, even though I didn't think it was bad, there were a lot of things I would have changed in the book, say if I was the author. The main things that I would change in this book is 1) add a backstory, or flashback of the events that happened in the previous books and 2) Make Cynthia a much more smarter character lol.
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Second, I would not include the how-to information concerning abortion and birth control pills at the back of the book. It's a romantic suspense book, not a clinic pamphlet. Am I being too harsh? I don't mean to be, I just really felt that those sections did not help the book or it's intended genre at all.
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I think it would be better if the author put more emphasis on one story or the other. The story of Cynthia, Dan, and Sky. Or the cyber war.Jo689 wrote: ↑07 Jun 2019, 08:17 I was actually thinking about this:
I thought the book was alright, unlike most. However, even though I didn't think it was bad, there were a lot of things I would have changed in the book, say if I was the author. The main things that I would change in this book is 1) add a backstory, or flashback of the events that happened in the previous books and 2) Make Cynthia a much more smarter character lol.
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That addendum was weird. The author had already covered a lot of that using Sky’s character. And it’s not new information. I wondered why it was included as well. Would seem more appropriate for nonfiction.VernaVi wrote: ↑11 Jun 2019, 00:47 Great question! I think first I would delete the one-night -stand (since the book is titled "Cynthia and Dan").
Second, I would not include the how-to information concerning abortion and birth control pills at the back of the book. It's a romantic suspense book, not a clinic pamphlet. Am I being too harsh? I don't mean to be, I just really felt that those sections did not help the book or it's intended genre at all.
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My first thought went to Sky as well. His character was very unrealistic and creepy in my opinion. I believe in love at first sight, but there is no love between him and Cynthia. I would have understood his behavior more if he were a terrorist trying to gain Cynthia's favor.