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AntonelaMaria wrote: ↑08 Jun 2019, 12:53 Well, I really didn't like the book so where should I start with the changes? I mean this is a big question. Probably would make Cynthia a bit stronger and smarter as a leading character and Sky less of a mr.know it all and creep.

Omg, the first chapters describing Sky were so creepy at times haha. I completely agree on this

I actually did not like the romance aspect of this book. I found it cliche and a bit annoying. And the break up with her current boyfriend was just too easy.

I would change the book in a lot of aspects. I would change the cheesy conversations of Cynthia and Sky. I would make Tim's task hard. Also I would remove the scene where Sky was arrested by the police. The timing was unreal.

I will sit down and actually write down character profiles for everyone who comes into the story. I will admit that the story has a lot of potential. It simply failed in its execution. I will also check whether the story is flowing smoothly without any hurdles. I will also try to make my protagonist level-headed.

Great question! I think realistic dialogue and fully fleshing out characters would have gone a long way!

If i were to make changes in this book I will simply rewrite the book because I found a lot of things wrong with this book.

Nice question, well if I was to change somethings I will start by making Cynthia roles to focuse more on the cyber and I will make her a more strong and senseable person because no adult in his or her right senses will have sex with a total stranger on the first without protections I really didn't expect that From her. And I will also correct some errors I found while reading this book.

I will remove the parts that had to do with Sky, Dan and Cynthia. The whole relationship thing was off to me. I will then make Cyber war seem a bit not too easy.

I will first remove the one night stand Cynthia had with Dan. I really dislike him.

I would definitely keep the character traits solid throughout the book. Cynthia's character was highly smart or highly dumb, depending on the situation. And I would make Sky and Cynthia's romance an actual romance and not a creepy one.

I agree with you I would also reduce the sex scene and reduce Cynthia role.

maggi3 wrote: ↑07 Jun 2019, 12:56 I agree with both of your points, but I would add better editing as well. I found a lot of errors in the book. Also, I would change Sky’s character so that he was a bit more believable and change the instant love aspect of his and Cynthia’s relationship.

You've said it all. Also, the book cover page needs more work.

True I agree with all your suggestions, I would have made Cynthia more morally upright too

What I would love to change about this book will be the title. I would have preferred Cynthia and Glen than Cynthia and Dan. Apparently Glenn had more significance than Dan

I would have added information on the background of some characters. I also don't feel Cynthia's character is one to cheat.