Review of We are Voulhire: A New Arrival under Great Skies
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Review of We are Voulhire: A New Arrival under Great Skies
[Following is a volunteer review of "We are Voulhire: A New Arrival under Great Skies" by Matthew Tysz.]
The narrative effectively captures a sense of suspense and intrigue, drawing readers into an ordinary night disrupted by the unsheathing of swords at Castle Hillport. The narrative skillfully builds tension through the reactions of the guards, chaotic scenes in the yard, and the mysterious force affecting the castle doors. The descriptive language creates a vivid atmosphere, from moonlight glinting off armor to the explosive moment when the doors are blasted outward. The captain's arrival adds authority and urgency, enhancing the overall pacing. The use of vivid imagery, such as splinters scattering to the stars, contributes to the atmospheric quality of the story. The concluding anticipation of footsteps on the porch stairs leaves the reader intrigued and eager to discover what will happen next. Overall, the narrative effectively engages readers with well-crafted suspense, vivid imagery, and a clear progression of events, making it a compelling read. On the first page of the book there are two errors found ;
1) In the sentence, "The head servant stepped out onto the high porch of Castle Hillport," it would be clearer to say "The head servant stepped out onto the high porch at(and not of)Castle Hillport." Because In the original sentence, "of Castle Hillport" might imply ownership or possession, which could be interpreted as if the porch belongs to Castle Hillport. The suggested change, "at Castle Hillport," more clearly indicates the location without implying ownership, making the sentence more precise and avoiding potential confusion.
2) In the sentence, "The eight guards in the main hall dropped the bar at the very moment an unseen force caused all the wood under the archway to rock," consider rephrasing it for clarity: "At that very moment, the eight guards in the main hall dropped the bar as an unseen force caused all the wood under the archway to rock." These changes aim to enhance clarity and flow, addressing minor issues in the original text. To explain for more understanding, in the original sentence, the sequence of events might benefit from a slight reordering for clarity. The suggested change emphasizes the timing of the action more explicitly, making it clear that dropping the bar coincides with the unseen force rocking the wood under the archway. This adjustment enhances the flow of the narrative by providing a clearer connection between the actions of the guards and the external force. The book is well narrated with good grammar and spellings
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We are Voulhire: A New Arrival under Great Skies
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The narrative effectively captures a sense of suspense and intrigue, drawing readers into an ordinary night disrupted by the unsheathing of swords at Castle Hillport. The narrative skillfully builds tension through the reactions of the guards, chaotic scenes in the yard, and the mysterious force affecting the castle doors. The descriptive language creates a vivid atmosphere, from moonlight glinting off armor to the explosive moment when the doors are blasted outward. The captain's arrival adds authority and urgency, enhancing the overall pacing. The use of vivid imagery, such as splinters scattering to the stars, contributes to the atmospheric quality of the story. The concluding anticipation of footsteps on the porch stairs leaves the reader intrigued and eager to discover what will happen next. Overall, the narrative effectively engages readers with well-crafted suspense, vivid imagery, and a clear progression of events, making it a compelling read. On the first page of the book there are two errors found ;
1) In the sentence, "The head servant stepped out onto the high porch of Castle Hillport," it would be clearer to say "The head servant stepped out onto the high porch at(and not of)Castle Hillport." Because In the original sentence, "of Castle Hillport" might imply ownership or possession, which could be interpreted as if the porch belongs to Castle Hillport. The suggested change, "at Castle Hillport," more clearly indicates the location without implying ownership, making the sentence more precise and avoiding potential confusion.
2) In the sentence, "The eight guards in the main hall dropped the bar at the very moment an unseen force caused all the wood under the archway to rock," consider rephrasing it for clarity: "At that very moment, the eight guards in the main hall dropped the bar as an unseen force caused all the wood under the archway to rock." These changes aim to enhance clarity and flow, addressing minor issues in the original text. To explain for more understanding, in the original sentence, the sequence of events might benefit from a slight reordering for clarity. The suggested change emphasizes the timing of the action more explicitly, making it clear that dropping the bar coincides with the unseen force rocking the wood under the archway. This adjustment enhances the flow of the narrative by providing a clearer connection between the actions of the guards and the external force. The book is well narrated with good grammar and spellings
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We are Voulhire: A New Arrival under Great Skies
View: on Bookshelves | on Amazon
