If you could change one thing about the book?
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Re: If you could change one thing about the book?
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I agree with you; more light should have been shed on the magic and the term bio magic. Explaining the distinctions between their qualities and users, as well as the rules that govern each. An explanation of why the latter was deemed bad and forbidden would have been preferable.Lucille27 wrote: ↑27 Oct 2020, 12:44 I think I would like to change the rhythm and some scenes. I would develop more on the magic and how it works, because this is a first book and we should have a clearer view on the rules it has. Also, I thought the ending was a bit convolluted, so maybe make it longer and reduce other parts that seemed as trivial scenes and weren't so connected.
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