I would make it longer. I would also allow the main story start quicker and remove unnecessary details from the book.Erandi Ekanayake wrote: ↑01 Oct 2020, 08:37 Imagine you were given a chance to change one thing about the book. It could be a person, an event, a decision, a course of action, or anything else.
How would you use this opportunity? Or do you think the book is perfect as it is?
If you could change one thing about the book?
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Re: If you could change one thing about the book?
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I would also change the structure and add some chapter numbers to make it more clear that the chapter has changed.
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This could point to a problem of focusing on too many characters, which I think was an issue. When a story has too many major characters, building the many characters may result in the story losing its appeal.gabrielletiemi wrote: ↑02 Oct 2020, 06:59I also thought about Galen seeming to be very one-dimensional, but the development of some other character is great. So I think it's something that happened because the author wanted to cast more light in some characters in this book.xsquare wrote: ↑02 Oct 2020, 04:16 I think the book could have done with a lot more character development. I know that this is only the first book, but it felt like the characters were rather one-dimensional? Galen doesn't even seem to be too affected by his experiences living in a war-torn country, and we didn't get to see more of Rowan's other traits besides him being 'mischievous' and 'playful'. I think if we had gotten better character development it'd be easier to root for them in the coming books too.
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