If you could change one thing about the book?

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Erandi Ekanayake wrote: 01 Oct 2020, 08:37 Imagine you were given a chance to change one thing about the book. It could be a person, an event, a decision, a course of action, or anything else.

How would you use this opportunity? Or do you think the book is perfect as it is? :eusa-think:
I would make it longer. I would also allow the main story start quicker and remove unnecessary details from the book.
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I would make sure that the characters aren't scattered everywhere. I'll tie up loose ends better, and also explain the origins of the biomage.
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These are the exact thoughts that go on in my mind anytime I remember this novel. If I'm given such opportunity, I will change the purpose for the character of Galen. I will give him a royal lineage which I will cause him to discover.
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I'd choose to save the mayor's family. Yeah, I get it - bloodshed is commonplace in fantasy and we shouldn't get too attached to the characters, but did the wife and daughter have to die like that, though? I would give them a chance to escape, or die less brutal deaths. Otherwise, the story is okay.
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I would remove the misoginy. It's not really that they say bad things about women but they are treated as a useless part of society that only care about cosmetics and vacations.
I would also change the structure and add some chapter numbers to make it more clear that the chapter has changed.
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I would change the death of Eldus and his family. He was such a likeable character.
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If it was up to me I would not allow Lord Eldus to be dead and I would convict Lord Meldorath for the rest of his life.
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gabrielletiemi wrote: 02 Oct 2020, 06:59
xsquare wrote: 02 Oct 2020, 04:16 I think the book could have done with a lot more character development. I know that this is only the first book, but it felt like the characters were rather one-dimensional? Galen doesn't even seem to be too affected by his experiences living in a war-torn country, and we didn't get to see more of Rowan's other traits besides him being 'mischievous' and 'playful'. I think if we had gotten better character development it'd be easier to root for them in the coming books too.
I also thought about Galen seeming to be very one-dimensional, but the development of some other character is great. So I think it's something that happened because the author wanted to cast more light in some characters in this book.
This could point to a problem of focusing on too many characters, which I think was an issue. When a story has too many major characters, building the many characters may result in the story losing its appeal.
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I would really like Lord Eldus to still be alive. I'll miss his enthusiasm and kindness.
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It would have to be how naive Galen is at certain points in the story. For someone coming from a war-torn land,he is far too generous and unsuspecting.
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I thoroughly enjoyed the book overall. But if I had to change one thing about the book it would be more detail about the different types of magic in this new world and how someone gains magic.
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I think that for the first book of a series, everything in the book was okay. Maybe I'd want more background information about a few side characters, but then again, it was only the first book. Although, maybe I would keep Lord Eldus alive because I fell in love with his character!
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I would probably change the cover. I feel like it could have been more captivating.
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I would have liked to know the characters a bit more. Even though I loved the book, It would have been nice to connect with the characters a bit.
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I would have included more female characters in the book and would have ensured that Lord Eldus made a significant contribution in Hillport before his death.
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