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Official Review: If I Die Before I Wake by Eli Shaw

Posted: 07 Feb 2020, 02:17
by NadineTimes10
[Following is an official OnlineBookClub.org review of "If I Die Before I Wake" by Eli Shaw.]
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2 out of 4 stars
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In If I Die Before I Wake: A Caregiver’s Journey, author Eli Shaw gives a true account of his work and service as a caregiver. The author’s journey began when he was ten years old. He met and befriended a boy with Down syndrome and protected his friend from verbally and physically abusive bullies. Since then, the author has spent many years working as a caregiver for others in both official and unofficial capacities. Central to the author’s account is his experience of caring for his best friend, a man with HIV.

In a down-to-earth style, Shaw weaves compelling social commentary into his memoir. He addresses stigmas that come along with certain diseases and disorders, describing how caregivers bear much of the negative impact. It is not the author’s intent for this book to be taken as a work of instruction with all the answers that caregivers need. Still, Shaw does impart some practical advice, and his transparent reflections can provide insight and hope for readers going through experiences similar to his. The author also includes a collection of short writings from people living with HIV, offering a valuable variety of perspectives.

Now, Shaw mentions that he wrote different chapters of this book in different years. Although it is not uncommon for an author to spend years writing a single work, the way the information is pieced together in this memoir has a fairly disjointed feel in places. At times, the author has a tendency to ramble and to veer away from the topic at hand, making it a bit difficult to follow his points. It is likely that much of the information in the book could have been more succinct, including the introductory details. The author spends time in the opening chapters explaining (or repeating) what the book is about and why he wrote it, essentially giving the book four introductions. The last few chapters, followed by the author’s acknowledgments and biography and then sections of additional reflections, give the closing of the book an awkward flow.

Also, the writing suffers from a number of technical errors. Incorrect and missing punctuation, inconsistent spelling, improperly formatted dialogue, and incorrect formatting of the titles of other works are issues throughout the book. Errors in letter case are also frequent, as the author often capitalizes common nouns while not all of the proper nouns are capitalized.

Overall, this memoir addresses sensitive areas of life and death with compassion, which readers can find enlightening and encouraging. Yet, the memoir would be stronger with a more concise and focused flow, better organization of its information, and more thorough editing to correct the technical errors and inconsistencies. Therefore, I give If I Die Before I Wake: A Caregiver’s Journey a rating of 2 out of 4 stars. I’d recommend it to memoir and nonfiction readers with an interest in health and wellness concerns and the care of humanity. However, the book should be reedited to satisfy a wider audience.

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Re: Official Review: If I Die Before I Wake by Eli Shaw

Posted: 08 Feb 2020, 19:07
by Laura Lee
Thanks for your analysis of this book. The title really grabbed my attention. This sounds like a really insightful book on a topic the author clearly knows a lot about. I hope he takes your feedback to heart and gives it a good editing to tighten and clean it up because there's a lot of need for books like this, especially now as Gen. X steps up and begins caring for dying parents. Until such time as this book is cleaned up, I'll take a pass.

Re: Official Review: If I Die Before I Wake by Eli Shaw

Posted: 09 Feb 2020, 22:45
by Charl2004
Thank you for taking the time to write this. I absolutely hate when authors constantly "recap" content in a book. I'm not sure if this is simply to add "fluff" but it's quite annoying.

Re: Official Review: If I Die Before I Wake by Eli Shaw

Posted: 10 Feb 2020, 05:42
by NadineTimes10
Laura Lee wrote: 08 Feb 2020, 19:07 Thanks for your analysis of this book. The title really grabbed my attention. This sounds like a really insightful book on a topic the author clearly knows a lot about.
I agree! :)

Re: Official Review: If I Die Before I Wake by Eli Shaw

Posted: 10 Feb 2020, 06:04
by NadineTimes10
Charl2004 wrote: 09 Feb 2020, 22:45 Thank you for taking the time to write this. I absolutely hate when authors constantly "recap" content in a book. I'm not sure if this is simply to add "fluff" but it's quite annoying.
I think in this case, the redundancy in some parts and the disjointed feel in others could possibly be due to the book being pieced together from different reflections over the course of years, not necessarily organized in the smoothest order so that the ideas would build on each other. It's almost as if not all of the chapters are aware of each other—where the other chapters fall in the book and what they've already said, or what they haven't said.

Another round of editing could iron out those details and give the memoir a better flow. :)

Re: Official Review: If I Die Before I Wake by Eli Shaw

Posted: 10 Feb 2020, 07:43
by Laura Lee
NadineTimes10 wrote: 10 Feb 2020, 06:04 I think in this case, the redundancy in some parts and the disjointed feel in others could possibly be due to the book being pieced together from different reflections over the course of years, not necessarily organized in the smoothest order so that the ideas would build on each other. It's almost as if not all of the chapters are aware of each other—where the other chapters fall in the book and what they've already said, or what they haven't said.

Another round of editing could iron out those details and give the memoir a better flow. :)
Another astute observation. I appreciate such clear analysis of a book.

Re: Official Review: If I Die Before I Wake by Eli Shaw

Posted: 15 Feb 2020, 01:18
by Amy747
Part advice, part story. These are my favourite type of novels.

Re: Official Review: If I Die Before I Wake by Eli Shaw

Posted: 15 Feb 2020, 02:27
by NadineTimes10
Amy747 wrote: 15 Feb 2020, 01:18 Part advice, part story. These are my favourite type of novels.
Yes! Well, this book is a memoir, not a novel. :) But when I read nonfiction, I tend to reach for memoirs because of the story element, as I oftentimes learn from stories better than I do just bare facts, statistics, or instructions. :techie-studyinggray:

Re: Official Review: If I Die Before I Wake by Eli Shaw

Posted: 15 Feb 2020, 08:24
by Amy747
NadineTimes10 wrote: 15 Feb 2020, 02:27
Amy747 wrote: 15 Feb 2020, 01:18 Part advice, part story. These are my favourite type of novels.
Yes! Well, this book is a memoir, not a novel. :) But when I read nonfiction, I tend to reach for memoirs because of the story element, as I oftentimes learn from stories better than I do just bare facts, statistics, or instructions. :techie-studyinggray:
Woops! Sorry for my mistake. Yes I agree that it helps to learn something when theres a story behind it.

Re: Official Review: If I Die Before I Wake by Eli Shaw

Posted: 15 Feb 2020, 16:24
by Marty_Kelly
Nice review. I agree with you about the choice of memoirs when presented with nonfiction. Your review has piqued my interest in this book.