Was the story too fast paced, or too centralized around the main character?
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Re: Was the story too fast paced, or too centralized around the main character?
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Since the protagonist was a telekinetic we see a lot of details related to them. But there are three other groups of Clairvoyants and each group has a different role to play for their clan as well their own selves. We do not see much details about their powers and weaknesses. It would have been better if a thorough understanding about clairvoyants was presented by the author to understand the battle in between the groups of clairvoyants.Ndive Mzamo wrote: ↑03 Sep 2021, 20:14 The story was too fast , main focus was on Rion. Not much was said about other characters . But I liked the way the author displayed Rion and had so much information about telekinetics. I learnt a lot from this book.
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Rion was given more screen time because he was the main protagonist and it was necessary for the foregoing of the plot. But if we consider his character per se, it would have been developed further and given the proper place of a protagonist. But Brady Moore has only revealed the facts about Rion which are necessary to the plot. That is why the character development feels too shallow.Seroney_ wrote: ↑04 Sep 2021, 07:15 I agree that most characters were superficially displayed. However, I am happy that Rion, the protagonist, was accorded time and space in the better part of the book. I would have loved it more if a few more characters were accorded the same privilege. That said, character development was shallowly done in this book.
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raj_nandani_poet wrote: ↑04 Sep 2021, 11:00 If felt like that to us but maybe there was a bigger purpose to series and thus the author saved those moments. It has happened in many series that a half- informed situation gets manipulated into creating something like deux-ex machina effect.
Thank you for introducing the term. You maybe correct, and the author may wanted to just name his weapons in his arsenal and keep them ready for later executions. But I am not sure what the readers will remember the 'just-mentioned' characters since they had a mere presence with no much significance. I think a better approach would have been introducing them later when the necessity occurs.Deus ex Machina is now the phrase used to describe any situation where something unexpected or implausible is brought in to the story line to resolve situations or disentangle a plot. The resolution could come from a new character, device, or event.
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I am not certain whether the side characters were developed at all. We see some details and character qualities of Rion since he is the protagonist as well as the narrator of the story. But for other characters we see only their actions and qualities which are necessary for the progression of the plot, and that is why they are felt like 'forced into' since we do not know their background and motives. Maybe that lacking was due to Rion being the only narrator and the reader had to see others through his eyes, but not the author's.Suzer6440 xyz wrote: ↑04 Sep 2021, 23:51 I was satisfied with how the characters were developed. The storyline and self was intriguing enough for me to follow each character’s purpose. I liked Rion and felt like the author did “just enough” to develop each character. The pace was perfect for me and I definitely did not think it was too centralized on Rion
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Maybe the author wanted to just name all the characters in his first book and later utilize them in the coming sequel. But I do not think that is a wise approach because the reader may not be able (most probably) to remember these characters when the sequel comes. These additional characters could have been introduced then and there when the necessity ooccurred and developed them as per the plot. Then their actions and motives would have been clearer.MayorE wrote: ↑05 Sep 2021, 13:03 In as much as I liked Rion’s character, I agree the book was fast-paced and some characters were not properly developed. Since there is a sequel to the novel, I think the author might just developer the characters properly and that would explain the fast pace of the novel
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Exactly, I observed the same thing with this book. Brady Moore gave more attention to Rion to an extent of failing to develop other characters in this book. In fact, other support player's actions seem not to be of their own but forced on them. Many people, just like me, love fast-paced stories, but character development is a key ingredient for any good fictional story. And therefore this a major flaw in the narrator storytelling skills.Sushan wrote: ↑01 Sep 2021, 00:29 It felt like the story jump from one point to another too quickly without giving any time to develop the supporting characters. At most occasions all the changes, actions, or the decisions of other characters occurred just to support the needs of the main protagonist. Sometimes they felt like forced and done with no real motivation of their own.
Did you feel this lack of character build up and the story being 'too-centralized' around Rion? Or was it simply because of the first person narrative?