Was the story too fast paced, or too centralized around the main character?
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Was the story too fast paced, or too centralized around the main character?
Did you feel this lack of character build up and the story being 'too-centralized' around Rion? Or was it simply because of the first person narrative?
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I agree. Seemingly the author wanted to touch many points within a short period, and to introduce many characters, scenarios, and many more as this book is a starter for a series. But when trying to do that the plot may have gone erratic and finally nothing has got enough focus.ej_author wrote: ↑01 Sep 2021, 16:37 I completely agree with you; I wrote almost the exact same thing in my review. It felt very much like a "plot drives the characters" novel rather than a "characters drive the plot" situation and there was very little of a healthy balance of that. I don't even necessarily think that the story was too focused on Rion; I just think the story went too quickly and the plot was too erratic. The side characters had the potential to be cool, but as you said, the story didn't even allow them time to breathe. Thanks for bringing up this point!
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I agree that the story felt forced. The characters were driven by the plot, and the author did not pay attention to developing the supportive characters. The book would be much more interesting if the supportive characters had more depth.Sushan wrote: ↑01 Sep 2021, 00:29 It felt like the story jump from one point to another too quickly without giving any time to develop the supporting characters. At most occasions all the changes, actions, or the decisions of other characters occurred just to support the needs of the main protagonist. Sometimes they felt like forced and done with no real motivation of their own.
Did you feel this lack of character build up and the story being 'too-centralized' around Rion? Or was it simply because of the first person narrative?
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This is not the only book as there is a series coming after. So the author could have simply stopped in an appropriate place and go to the next book if the book was getting too lengthy with the character development. It is good to introduce many characters at the beginning of the series. But the development of the characters is important too as there won't be appropriate moments to do that in later sequels of the series.Medhansh Bhardwaj wrote: ↑02 Sep 2021, 08:55 I agree with you. The storyline was a bit erratic and speedy. Many characters deserved much more lines, and many characters deserved better development. But then the story would have been too long given the huge number of characters and plots in it. But still, I would prefer a long story rather than an unbalanced one.
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True, I felt similarly. And not because of the narrative either. The transition was too fast especially when I would expect more from the character. It felt like there was so much unharnessed potential for a better storyline with more depth which would have been utilized if they characters were allowed to take root, develop and blossom.Sushan wrote: ↑01 Sep 2021, 00:29 It felt like the story jump from one point to another too quickly without giving any time to develop the supporting characters. At most occasions all the changes, actions, or the decisions of other characters occurred just to support the needs of the main protagonist. Sometimes they felt like forced and done with no real motivation of their own.
Did you feel this lack of character build up and the story being 'too-centralized' around Rion? Or was it simply because of the first-person narrative?
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In addition to what you said, some of the characters are totally forgotten towards the latter lart of the book. The author introduces many characters, but takes the story forward without developing any of them. If Brady Moore has selected atleast a few and looked more into them, the reader could have atleast ddifferentiated the important and less important side-characters.kperm wrote: ↑02 Sep 2021, 12:43I agree that the story felt forced. The characters were driven by the plot, and the author did not pay attention to developing the supportive characters. The book would be much more interesting if the supportive characters had more depth.Sushan wrote: ↑01 Sep 2021, 00:29 It felt like the story jump from one point to another too quickly without giving any time to develop the supporting characters. At most occasions all the changes, actions, or the decisions of other characters occurred just to support the needs of the main protagonist. Sometimes they felt like forced and done with no real motivation of their own.
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