What do you think could enhance the book?

Post by **Nasir Shaikh** » 11 Jan 2024, 14:33

I've just started learning about the book's plot and potential. Although I haven't finished it yet, I'd appreciate hearing your opinions on whether there are areas that could be improved or if it's perfect for you.

Jay Lu · Post by **Jay Lu** » 11 Jan 2024, 17:19

To enhance "The Great Migration: Book One" by Steve Ramirez, consider simplifying the initial complexity for easier reader engagement, further editing for language refinement, making characters more distinct and memorable, ensuring consistent pacing, delving deeper into underlying themes, and perhaps including visual aids like maps or illustrations. Expanding on the backstory and world-building can also enrich the reader's immersion in this fantasy world.

Post by **Nasir Shaikh** » 12 Jan 2024, 06:47

Jay Lu wrote: ↑11 Jan 2024, 17:19 To enhance "The Great Migration: Book One" by Steve Ramirez, consider simplifying the initial complexity for easier reader engagement, further editing for language refinement, making characters more distinct and memorable, ensuring consistent pacing, delving deeper into underlying themes, and perhaps including visual aids like maps or illustrations. Expanding on the backstory and world-building can also enrich the reader's immersion in this fantasy world.

That's a really good perspective, and I totally agree about the pictures. I would have liked more details about the background story too. Thanks a lot for sharing your thoughts.

Post by **Sam Jonas** » 13 Jan 2024, 01:27

It had too many characters. That’s a way to simplify it, but reducing the number of characters.

Patrícia Gomes · Post by **Patrícia Gomes** » 13 Jan 2024, 05:00

I don't agree that there were too many characters. What I believe would enhance the book is the way these different points of view could be connected or intersect a bit more. This way, there is a deeper understanding of the plot and, therefore, we can create an even bigger connection with the different characters.

Post by **Huini Hellen** » 13 Jan 2024, 08:09

Nasir Shaikh wrote: ↑11 Jan 2024, 14:33 I've just started learning about the book's plot and potential. Although I haven't finished it yet, I'd appreciate hearing your opinions on whether there are areas that could be improved or if it's perfect for you.

I think the book is perfect, considering it's a first installment. I particularly love how Steve eliminated some characters that would have otherwise diverted focus from the protagonist, without destroying the plot. The premise of the book as it is sets it up for a second installment, which will provide more insight the remaining characters that Steve let live.

Zanne Crystle · Post by **Zanne Crystle** » 13 Jan 2024, 09:04

The author does a good job of revealing the story's background and setting through dialogue and action, rather than long and boring descriptions. However, there are times when the exposition feels forced and unrealistic. These parts of the story disrupted the plot's flow and made the characters seem less believable and relatable.

Post by **Nasir Shaikh** » 14 Jan 2024, 15:22

Patrícia Gomes wrote: ↑13 Jan 2024, 05:00 I don't agree that there were too many characters. What I believe would enhance the book is the way these different points of view could be connected or intersect a bit more. This way, there is a deeper understanding of the plot and, therefore, we can create an even bigger connection with the different characters.

I agree with you, having lots of characters can be an issue, but it's better to link them well instead of getting rid of some. Making sure each character fits nicely into the story is the way to go, keeping things interesting without losing anyone.

Post by **Erikpume Victory** » 15 Jan 2024, 17:17

I think the write should enhance the connection between the points and make it simple for newbies that are venturing into fictional stories to understand

Patrícia Gomes · Post by **Patrícia Gomes** » 16 Jan 2024, 08:44

Erikpume Victory wrote: ↑15 Jan 2024, 17:17 I think the write should enhance the connection between the points and make it simple for newbies that are venturing into fictional stories to understand

That's a really good point! Once you start reading fiction, especially sci-fi it can be quite difficult to not feel overwhelmed by the world-building, the different characters, and the overall imagination. I agree with you 100%.

Shirley Ann Riddern Labzentis · 19 Jan 2024, 18:46

The only thing that I feel could enhance the book is maybe writing in more of the background story of the characters. For me, there was not too many characters, and as far as the maps and illustrations, I usually just pass over them.

Patrícia Gomes · Post by **Patrícia Gomes** » 20 Jan 2024, 05:38

Jay Lu wrote: ↑11 Jan 2024, 17:19 To enhance "The Great Migration: Book One" by Steve Ramirez, consider simplifying the initial complexity for easier reader engagement, further editing for language refinement, making characters more distinct and memorable, ensuring consistent pacing, delving deeper into underlying themes, and perhaps including visual aids like maps or illustrations. Expanding on the backstory and world-building can also enrich the reader's immersion in this fantasy world.

I agree! I wouldn't recommend the book to anyone because it can be quite hard to begin reading sci-fi with this book. At the same time is the world-building that catches the reader's attention.

Patrícia Gomes · Post by **Patrícia Gomes** » 20 Jan 2024, 05:40

Erikpume Victory wrote: ↑15 Jan 2024, 17:17 I think the write should enhance the connection between the points and make it simple for newbies that are venturing into fictional stories to understand

I 100% agree! It can be difficult to understand such a complicated world-building at first. But once you start to get hold of the book it is hard to put it down. But i agree the complexity should evolve and not be such a dramatic punch right away.

Post by **Alex Lynn** » 20 Jan 2024, 12:19

At first read, I did not quickly grab what was going on, until I read into the book then I started enjoying it. So I went back to read again to enjoy it better from the beginning. I think the author should adjust the starting scenes to an easy-to-understand style.

Post by **Nasir Shaikh** » 20 Jan 2024, 14:28

Alex Lynn wrote: ↑20 Jan 2024, 12:19 At first read, I did not quickly grab what was going on, until I read into the book then I started enjoying it. So I went back to read again to enjoy it better from the beginning. I think the author should adjust the starting scenes to an easy-to-understand style.

Absolutely, I can relate to that experience!

It took me some time as well to grasp the beginning when I first started reading it. However, after delving deeper into it, I now have a much better understanding.