Official Review: I'm The Killers Sweetheart

[Vscholz]

[Following is an official OnlineBookClub.org review of "I'm The Killers Sweetheart" by Avery Collins.]

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1 out of 4 stars

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When Jon-Luc is taken into custody under suspicion of murdering his girlfriend and baby, police officer Jay-Ma feels sparks of electricity every time they touch. Upon his initial release, they pursue a lust-filled romance. Will Jay-Ma be able to hide the relationship and maintain her position as an officer of the law?

I'm the Killers Sweetheart [sic] by Avery Collins is a short story chronicling the whirlwind relationship between a police officer and a criminal. The first chapter details what lead Jon-Luc to murder his girlfriend and her child; the remainder of the book goes into the thoughts and actions of Jon-Luc and Jay-Ma. The story mostly focuses on the romance between the couple and spends little time on the actual crime.

I liked the alternating points of view. It allows the reader to experience the story along with both protagonists. Even though it is not expertly written, it is an easy and fast read, making it perfect for an afternoon read. There is a sex scene, which is perhaps the best written part of the book (aside from some of the adjectives, which are discussed later). I appreciated that this scene was not overly gratuitous, making it almost explicit without going into too much detail.

I disliked most of the story. In addition to the several editing errors (noticeably the use of “rumish” instead of “rummage”) and repetition of words (“slobbery” to describe their kisses), I had a problem with the characters. Jay-Ma immediately rushes into a relationship with an accused murderer, something I feel a reputable police officer would not do. Her ensuing actions are also questionable, especially her solution to allowing her relationship with Jon-Luc to continue. I was also disappointed in the lack of character development. The story would be improved if it were longer and explored more of the issues Jon-Luc has aside from briefly mentioning the medications he takes. I would have also liked more details about the murder or at least more clarification on how the couple followed through with their plan to be together.

I rate this book 1 out of 4 stars because of the editing errors as well as how quickly the plot moves. I feel as though there is more to the story, especially because the copy provided for this review is imprinted with “DRAFT” on all pages. If I were to recommend this book, it would be to people looking for a quick read featuring a sex scene. For me to refer others to this book, it would need several rounds of editing.

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[kandscreeley]

Well, this isn't my genre to begin with. Plus with all the issues you mention, it's definitely not one I would pick up. I agree that any good police officer would not rush into a relationship with someone accused of murder. That seems quite unrealistic. Thanks for the review. I pass.

[TJanowski23]

This isn't my genre either. However it's the editing issues that always turn me off of a book so I'll pass too. Thanks for the review!

[T_stone]

This story seems like those stories in which you can enjoy romance and crime stories in it. It's quite unfortunate it is poorly written. Thanks for the sincere review.

[Vscholz]

Well, this isn't my genre to begin with. Plus with all the issues you mention, it's definitely not one I would pick up. I agree that any good police officer would not rush into a relationship with someone accused of murder. That seems quite unrealistic. Thanks for the review. I pass.

If there was more of a buildup, and if it were better edited, it would be so much better.

Thanks for commenting! It is always a pleasure to see your name on here!

[Vscholz]

This isn't my genre either. However it's the editing issues that always turn me off of a book so I'll pass too. Thanks for the review!

I don't mind taking chances outside of my preferences, but I'm often burned. Those who don't pay attention to errors would enjoy it just fine, I think. Thanks for stopping by and commenting!

[Vscholz]

This story seems like those stories inb which you can enjoy romance and crime stories in it. It's quite unfortunate it is poorly written. Thanks for the sincere review.

The romance needed more time to develop. The crime was also interesting but the story is just poorly executed. Hopefully the author continues writing so she can improve! Thanks for the comment!

[Cecilia_L]

It's hard to imagine that the author used the word "slobbery" to describe kisses! I enjoyed your candid review.

[Vscholz]

It's hard to imagine that the author used the word "slobbery" to describe kisses! I enjoyed your candid review.

It's a bit like a teenager's first ever kiss. Definitely cringeworthy. Thanks for commenting!

[Kelyn]

I think just hearing that they repeatedly used the word "slobbery" to describe their kisses says it all. Not my genre anyway, but I think the premise of a respected police officer (female or male) rushing into a relationship with an accused murderer is just unrealistic, even for fiction. I could probably overlook the editing errors but I think I have to give this one a pass. I'm glad I read your review before even thinking about reading the book. Thanks!

[Sweet Psamy]

A detective story with an explosive romance is the bomb. I want to read this book.

[Ashiyya Tariq]

Plot is very unrealistic and absurd. I will surely avoid this one. Thanks for this honest review.

[Vscholz]

I think just hearing that they repeatedly used the word "slobbery" to describe their kisses says it all. Not my genre anyway, but I think the premise of a respected police officer (female or male) rushing into a relationship with an accused murderer is just unrealistic, even for fiction. I could probably overlook the editing errors but I think I have to give this one a pass. I'm glad I read your review before even thinking about reading the book. Thanks!

Sometimes passion is... not pretty. It isn't what the media portrays. But entertainment is an escape, and slobbery is definitely a way to pull people out of the fantasy. Thanks for commenting!

[Vscholz]

A detective story with an explosive romance is the bomb. I want to read this book.

It was a quick read. I hope you enjoy it! Thanks for stopping by!

[Vscholz]

Plot is very unrealistic and absurd. I will surely avoid this one. Thanks for this honest review.

I could have dealt with the absurdity if it were better written. It would be interesting to see a revised version. Thanks for your comment!