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[Following is an official OnlineBookClub.org review of "Who Is She" by shalom kolontarov.]

In Who Is She, Shalom Kolontarov gives a fictional account of the romance between Sam and Emma who come from different social classes. Sam was the son of Mr. King and Grace. His parents were very wealthy, but they hardly ever spent time with him. Their maid, Mrs. Nanny, took up the responsibility of raising and providing emotional care to Sam. Later, Sam's parents made the decision to ship 6-year-old Sam off to boarding school. Sam returned home 12 years later. At that point, Mrs. Nanny had been fired by Grace. The next time Sam would see Mrs. Nanny was at his 18th birthday party where he first met Mrs. Nanny's granddaughter, Emma. From that point, a romantic relationship began to develop between Sam and Emma. However, Mr. King didn't approve of his son being involved with someone that he saw as lower class. Could Sam and Emma's love withstand the tests that came from Mr. King?

Romance is my favourite genre. So, before picking up this book, after reading the description, I felt that I had a good idea of what to expect. However, while I was intrigued by the plot, the book's execution disappointed me. Sadly, I have to rate Who Is She 1 out of 4 stars.

The first thing I disliked about this book was the editing and organization. Before I read up to five pages of the book, I found over 20 errors. The book was almost devoid of punctuation marks. There were also many instances of misspelled words. An example of what to expect in this book with regards to editing can be seen in the sentence: "And they all leave except for one is still waving to Sam and Emma notice it and she pushes her but she doesn’t fall continues waving to him and goes inside the tenth as well." This made navigating through the book very difficult for me. Inconsistent spacing was also a distracting feature of the book.

The only thing that kept me reading was the plot. The author focused mostly on developing the plot. However, this affected character development greatly. There was no description of any of the characters. This prevented me from understanding any of them and their motives. I was just curious to find out how the story would end. The author also frequently mixed up character names.

Overall, I didn't enjoy reading Who Is She. I only enjoyed reading the poem Sam recited at a party, but the poems didn't do much to change my opinion of the book. The book's ending was also sudden and underwhelming. I would not recommend this book to anyone. Poor editing and organization, poor character development, and an underwhelming end to the story justify my rating of this book.

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prospero360 wrote: ↑04 Jan 2019, 08:37 An example of what to expect in this book with regards to editing can be seen in the sentence: "And they all leave except for one is still waving to Sam and Emma notice it and she pushes her but she doesn’t fall continues waving to him and goes inside the tenth as well."

Wow.
I don't think I would have persevered if the writing was that bad - so well done!

I had a hard time reading the example sentence provided in this review. If the whole book is similar in writing style and lack of editing, I would have a hard time being able to finish it. It takes a lot of structured development and editing time to create the perfect mix of detail. I don’t like an overabundance of detail in the books I read, but I can see how too little detail would also detract from a story. This sounds like a difficult book to complete. Great job on sticking with it!

The example sentence is horrible. I'm sad to say, but there it is. I definitely don't want to read this one. It's really too bad as it seems like it couple be developed into something good.

It is a shame that there were that many errors. The example definitely justified your score, and I hope the author works on those things. Thanks for your review.

Your first paragraph really had me getting interested in this book. But the sample sentence you cited burst that bubble! Thanks for your honest review of this book. Hope your next book is more satisfying!

You persevered to read up the end despite the errors. Thank you for the honest review, I guess I would pass this book then.

It must have been a hard ride for you judging by the example sentence you cited. I think writers have good ideas, themes whatever they call it but oftentimes they fail to execute them just like what you said in this particular book.

I admire the romance relationship between Sam and Emma. Love knows no social status. Blessings!

20+ errors in the first five pages? Ouch. The author clearly needed an editor

Romance is also my favorite genre. I try to make sure there is always at least a little bit of romance going on in any fiction work I read. It's sucks that you didn't get to enjoy what could have been an exceptional love story because of the grammar. I hate when that happens. This is why I see editors as heaven sent. Regardless, I enjoyed reading your review. You did a good job justifying your rating.