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Yes! It was! A beautiful fairy with opalescent and magnificent but fragile wings and eyes that seemed to pierce her soul.
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The Fairy smiles showing her sharp fangs. Brineesha just stands there her wide eyes riveted on those tiny fangs, taking in a shaky breath she asks the Fairy if she was the one responsible for the all strangeness happening to her.
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"Yes, you are!" The fairy answered. "a person is responsible for the outcome of their lives." Brineesha's heart broke and she felt so sorrowful. This is the end of all the effort she had put in, there was no need try anymore. No one to die for and no one to live for. As she turned to walk off, a voice whispered her name in the darkness...
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Brineeeeeesha the Voice is eerie like it is in the air the whisper grows louder. Come back it says come back and face what you must. I can help you Brineesha . She turns and there is a white glow in front of her the light begins to dim and a beautiful angel appears before her. All the sadness leaves her body and a calm over takes her.
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It was Brandon who she thought was her brother. He asks for her hand in marriage, confused she...
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stands there wondering if this is some kind of sick joke.
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But no. Brandon was always in the presence of Brineesha throughout all of her fantasy escapes. He played along as her partner in crime while she was not taking her psychotropics. He wondered if a true crime had been committed while breathlessly waiting for her answer.
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This shouldn't be happening she thinks I have been taking the medication. Then she tired to remember how long has she been gone her mind is so confused. Brandon must be playing a game with her again right? Smiling she looks at Brandon...
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There was no way Brandon could be sincerely asking her to marry him. Everyone knew she was unstable and had trust issues, him better than anyone else. Not to mention how often she confused him, in her delusions, with her long dead brother.
Yet he looked sincere, and he had spoken the words.
"You don't have a ring," she said jokingly, willing to play along but hoping he wasn't serious.
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"The ring is just tradition", he said."How about we break it?"
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"Break it" she said in a loud voice. You ask for my hand in marriage and now you want us to break it?
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"Only the single tradition that has nothing to do with the actual ceremony that binds us together for life. Even without the ring, we can be married," Brandon said.
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I Can not marry you Brandon you are my brother and it would be so wrong.
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Then out of the shadows, stepped the most beautiful creature she had ever laid eyes on.
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Brandon looked annoyed. "Look, I don't know who you are, but I was just proposing to Brineesha here. Can you give us a second?"
But the beautiful creature (which was vaguely reminiscent of a snow fox combined with a dolphin) shook its head and stepped between the two dubiously related humans.
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