Shades of Shadows

knightss · Post by **knightss** » 21 Mar 2008, 21:52

Reading Kae's Blog put me in the mood to write =)
This is probably awful but i'm always up for throwing it all out there

Rip me apart, if you'd like

Shades of Shadows

The bell tolls again, he could hear the whispering
From his windows. Another gone, they said,
Another lost amongst the shades of shadows.
When night falls, he’ll scamper and play, against
The backdrop of the sylvan path or the city’s maze.
He was young, you see, merely 12.
Not as prepared, yet more prepared,
Then anyone will ever be.
Death wasn’t a thought, you see,
To this boy of merely 12.
It was another day
Amongst the grass and leaves,
Where he made his way through the grove.
Billy, they said, Billy is dead,
Billy will no longer roam,
Billy, they sighed, Billy will lie,
Amongst the grass and leaves,
Beneath the summers breeze,
As we carry on life
For what reason, I wonder, why?

Billy, they said.

Reading it again, it's pretty bad haha

KaeMartyndale · Post by **KaeMartyndale** » 21 Mar 2008, 22:59

knightss wrote:Reading Kae's Blog put me in the mood to write =)

That I could inspire anyone even a tiny bit makes my day

Tracey Neal · Post by **Tracey Neal** » 22 Mar 2008, 00:40

No Knightss this is beautiful!! Death can be a challenge to write about I think, your imagery is very moving, wonderful piece Knightss, I love it

Hope · Post by **Hope** » 22 Mar 2008, 04:01

Beatiful poem

knightss · Post by **knightss** » 27 Mar 2008, 10:51

thank you =)

Syrcco44 · Post by **Syrcco44** » 28 Mar 2008, 23:41

Mmm.. this is good.

Nice blog Kae - your poems are very rich and eloquent. Keep it up. We need more poets like you in this world.

KaeMartyndale · Post by **KaeMartyndale** » 29 Mar 2008, 10:00

Syrcco44 wrote:Nice blog Kae - your poems are very rich and eloquent. Keep it up. We need more poets like you in this world.

Wow. Thank you.

Gard · Post by **Gard** » 07 Apr 2008, 16:19

Hey, i'm new, hello everyone!

I can never and have never been able to write poems. But i do love to read them.

Shades of Shadows

The bell tolls again, he could hear the whispering
From his windows. Another gone, they said,
Another lost amongst the shades of shadows.
When night falls, he’ll scamper and play, against
The backdrop of the sylvan path or the city’s maze.
He was young, you see, merely 12.
Not as prepared, yet more prepared,
Then anyone will ever be.
Death wasn’t a thought, you see,
To this boy of merely 12.
It was another day
Amongst the grass and leaves,
Where he made his way through the grove.
Billy, they said, Billy is dead,
Billy will no longer roam,
Billy, they sighed, Billy will lie,
Amongst the grass and leaves,
Beneath the summers breeze,
As we carry on life
For what reason, I wonder, why?

Billy, they said.

It's really good, i quite like it. It's simple, over complicating a complicated emotion, i think, often leads to the writer not really conveying the emotion.

Death is very hard to write about it and its probably even harder to get over. Do you think there is a link there?

Gard

knightss · Post by **knightss** » 07 Apr 2008, 16:44

Thanks =) i'm glad you enjoy it

jasonk1234 · Post by **jasonk1234** » 28 Jun 2008, 19:37

I like the paragraph mate, is this a book you are currently working on?

PaperStory · Post by **PaperStory** » 03 Aug 2008, 16:55

I actually really liked it!

the tiger fights · Post by **the tiger fights** » 20 Mar 2012, 20:28

When death is spoken of, in such a simple, beautiful poem, the reader is sad yet less threatened . . . and your poem does just that. Very nice indeed. Roll onward to success.