Your First Sentence(s)
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Your First Sentence(s)
Here is mine. It is from a short-short around 1500 words.
"His screams permeate the walls, echo in my soul."
That's right, I have a muse. It is spelled MusE. My writing is influenced by the interactions of people I meet - us and ME.
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That is an interesting start, Ambiguity. My first thought was how can everything happen in a night which is silent, not to mention wondering what 'it all' is. So, you have me thinking, and that is a good thing when trying to hook a reader. It would at least keep me reading to find out the next sentence.ambiguity+ wrote:The first story I wrote this year (which is still incomplete) starts from "It all happened in one silent night... "
That's right, I have a muse. It is spelled MusE. My writing is influenced by the interactions of people I meet - us and ME.
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"I kill people for a living."
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Though I am not even sure this is my first chapter yet. I appreciate this thread, because it really makes me think about that first line. Like the earlier posts, the first sentence is possibly the difference maker in whether or not the book goes from the shelf to the checkout line. Good topic.
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Very true. Sometimes, I have a first line floating around in my head, long before I even know what the story is going to be. However, when the story is finished, I often find that first line was merely the catalyst for thinking, and I end up changing it to something stronger and which reflects the story.randolphfine wrote:"He took another sip and did what he always did –he remembered."
Though I am not even sure this is my first chapter yet. I appreciate this thread, because it really makes me think about that first line. Like the earlier posts, the first sentence is possibly the difference maker in whether or not the book goes from the shelf to the checkout line. Good topic.
I wish I could remember where I read it, but I remember something about the end of your story can be found in the first few lines. Certainly, it is not obvious to the reader at first, but it is always interesting to see if you can tie the thread that meanders through the story into a satisfying reflection on those first few lines.
That's right, I have a muse. It is spelled MusE. My writing is influenced by the interactions of people I meet - us and ME.
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I have my first and last chapters tied together, but the actual lines are not. I think this is something I will definitely have to look at when I get closer to completion. Thanks.KEW wrote: I remember something about the end of your story can be found in the first few lines. Certainly, it is not obvious to the reader at first, but it is always interesting to see if you can tie the thread that meanders through the story into a satisfying reflection on those first few lines.
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The lines themselves don't have to be tied together, but I love stories that end resonating with the beginning.randolphfine wrote:I have my first and last chapters tied together, but the actual lines are not. I think this is something I will definitely have to look at when I get closer to completion. Thanks.KEW wrote: I remember something about the end of your story can be found in the first few lines. Certainly, it is not obvious to the reader at first, but it is always interesting to see if you can tie the thread that meanders through the story into a satisfying reflection on those first few lines.
That's right, I have a muse. It is spelled MusE. My writing is influenced by the interactions of people I meet - us and ME.
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The latest "The cool, wet pavement against my bare feet was something that I had missed after spending so much time underground."
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I want to write again. I just haven't "felt" it in so long. It has an energy of its own. I love it.
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ginger ale. If 'Busters Last Stand' was half a league, Buster2 was in a league all it's own."
I'm not a writer. But I want to be one when I grow up. One of the things that's
impressed me about good writing, good filmaking, or good anything, is the
artist's use of the first sentence(opening) to set the tone of the story. Francis Coppola
is a genius at this. Coppola does not bull**it. "My film isn't about Vietnam. It is Vietnam.
In the end, we had too much money and too much time. And we all went crazy."
Every guy in the audience has just been told "We're going to KILL everything. And we're
going to do it with Dance of the Valkyries leading us into Battle." GO!!!
You have to get your audience on your side NOW. And that's what the first sentence should do.
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I've been editing a novella that I plan to query in a few weeks...that's the first sentence.
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my notables. Certain criteria had to be met. And this fool in the rain hadn't met them.
Duh duh ta dumpty dump. Oh baby. Now I will stand in
the rain on the conah. Watch the fools as they shuffle on by. another sad minute, no longer. When will I see you again? Again......again oh yea.....again. Balls. I was stone
sober. But I wanted so badly to see her again. I .was willing to...........(a yawn and a hurl
deposit the midnight special(Fries,BLT,Shake, and KeyLimePie) at his feet. TheTechnicolorYawn. How shameless. What kind of drunk have I become? Scoreless.
And on so many levels."