Persuasive writing from Prompts
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Persuasive writing from Prompts
This is just a fictional, completely made up persuasive piece I wrote for my English class...
Sylvia: The Risk Taker of Life
Would you take such a big risk as to be heart broken, in debt, without your family, no where to go, and all when you are 16? This is some people's result at having an adventure. Sylvia wants to take this risk; she doesn’t like sharing a room with her sister, wants more freedom, and has a boyfriend in college. She wants emancipation, but she has all of these factors that could cause it to go wrong. Sylvia should stay at home and not seek emancipation because she will be better prepped for her future, her relationship isn’t guaranteed to last, her parents still provide a lot, and she isn’t mature enough to handle the world so young.
First, Sylvia should stay at home because living at home longer will cause her to be more prepared for the future. If she is better prepared she could be more successful. Fred Wilmoth, a professor from Harvard, shares his opinion in one of his books. He states, “Teens aren’t as grown or mature as they think they are, and they should take the time they have with the wise people around them to learn to be smart for the future.” This shows that Sylvia should stay home. She, at 16, has not had the time she still needs to learn about the “real world”, if she choose to stay at home though, she would get more time to grow.
Next, Sylvia may get tied up with some problems with a boy friend in college; also she will be completely lost when they break up. Statistics have shown that one out of every five couples in high school and college break up. Also it is very clear today at schools how many people get together and break up within a few months. Plus from personal experience, how many relationship really last? If this relationship happens to last what would it be like with no job, bills, and payments coming in? Seeking emancipation under these circumstances is not a wise choice. (Carson)
Third, Sylvia’s parents provide a good room, food, money, and transportation at the least. Right now what’s the point of moving out when Sylvia has it so good? Personal freedom now isn’t as important as responsibility in the long run, and if Sylvia has to provide everything she may not end up getting what she is looking for. Her favorite author, Julia Mattias, wrote in her autobiography that she was in this same predicament when she was 16; she sought emancipation, received it, but now regrets it. Sylvia should listen to someone as admirable as Julia Mattias and not move out.
Finally, Sylvia should choose to stay at home because she is only 16, not even finished with high school, has little experience in life, and her brain isn’t fully developed. Sylvia shouldn’t move out because clearly, she is too immature. It has been proven that the human mind doesn’t fully develop until we are 25 (Statistics). This shows that really, she isn’t mentally mature enough to be moving out. Therefore she should not seek emancipation based on the simple fact that she isn’t ready.
In conclusion, Sylvia should not look to be emancipated. First of all, she is not prepared and by staying at home she can learn a lot from the people around her. Second, she could very easily have financial turmoil and her relationship most likely wont last. Also, she is very well provided for and she is much more fortunate at home than most people around the world. Last, she isn’t mature enough to handle the real world. So, would it be considered wise to move out at 16, with all the risks, like losing everything you have?
Works Cited
Statistics. Texas: Warner Bros. 2009.
Carson, Lyle. Awesome facts. Florida: National Geographic. 1998.
Mattias, Julia. The Life of Me. California: Presley Inc. 1999
Wilmoth, Fred. Facts for Parents about their Kids. Oklahoma: Freedom Co. 2005
Sylvia: The Risk Taker of Life
Would you take such a big risk as to be heart broken, in debt, without your family, no where to go, and all when you are 16? This is some people's result at having an adventure. Sylvia wants to take this risk; she doesn’t like sharing a room with her sister, wants more freedom, and has a boyfriend in college. She wants emancipation, but she has all of these factors that could cause it to go wrong. Sylvia should stay at home and not seek emancipation because she will be better prepped for her future, her relationship isn’t guaranteed to last, her parents still provide a lot, and she isn’t mature enough to handle the world so young.
First, Sylvia should stay at home because living at home longer will cause her to be more prepared for the future. If she is better prepared she could be more successful. Fred Wilmoth, a professor from Harvard, shares his opinion in one of his books. He states, “Teens aren’t as grown or mature as they think they are, and they should take the time they have with the wise people around them to learn to be smart for the future.” This shows that Sylvia should stay home. She, at 16, has not had the time she still needs to learn about the “real world”, if she choose to stay at home though, she would get more time to grow.
Next, Sylvia may get tied up with some problems with a boy friend in college; also she will be completely lost when they break up. Statistics have shown that one out of every five couples in high school and college break up. Also it is very clear today at schools how many people get together and break up within a few months. Plus from personal experience, how many relationship really last? If this relationship happens to last what would it be like with no job, bills, and payments coming in? Seeking emancipation under these circumstances is not a wise choice. (Carson)
Third, Sylvia’s parents provide a good room, food, money, and transportation at the least. Right now what’s the point of moving out when Sylvia has it so good? Personal freedom now isn’t as important as responsibility in the long run, and if Sylvia has to provide everything she may not end up getting what she is looking for. Her favorite author, Julia Mattias, wrote in her autobiography that she was in this same predicament when she was 16; she sought emancipation, received it, but now regrets it. Sylvia should listen to someone as admirable as Julia Mattias and not move out.
Finally, Sylvia should choose to stay at home because she is only 16, not even finished with high school, has little experience in life, and her brain isn’t fully developed. Sylvia shouldn’t move out because clearly, she is too immature. It has been proven that the human mind doesn’t fully develop until we are 25 (Statistics). This shows that really, she isn’t mentally mature enough to be moving out. Therefore she should not seek emancipation based on the simple fact that she isn’t ready.
In conclusion, Sylvia should not look to be emancipated. First of all, she is not prepared and by staying at home she can learn a lot from the people around her. Second, she could very easily have financial turmoil and her relationship most likely wont last. Also, she is very well provided for and she is much more fortunate at home than most people around the world. Last, she isn’t mature enough to handle the real world. So, would it be considered wise to move out at 16, with all the risks, like losing everything you have?
Works Cited
Statistics. Texas: Warner Bros. 2009.
Carson, Lyle. Awesome facts. Florida: National Geographic. 1998.
Mattias, Julia. The Life of Me. California: Presley Inc. 1999
Wilmoth, Fred. Facts for Parents about their Kids. Oklahoma: Freedom Co. 2005
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