Friends

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Friends
The pool smelled of chlorine. My eyes are burning and red from swimming all day. I never wear goggles. The sun scorched my skin. Benny, a kid in the neighborhood, who is not my friend, is too curious. He was always too curious about things. One time when we were kids and we were forced to play with each other, he decided to scale a pine tree. He said he wanted to know what was on the top. Do birds live there? Do little elves live there? Sometimes, it was exhausting to listen to his little games of curiosity. Now that we’re a little bit older, he had not lost even a bit of that curious nature of his. He wanted to know how long he could stare at the sun. Surely, he said, the sun cannot be stronger than him. He’s a big fat kid so he foolishly believed that he could do anything. Now we are at the swimming pool of our neighbor. They are on vacation. Benny decided to let me in on his secret. He found a swimming shorts in his backyard, put it on, and he found the key in his pocket. The key into the backyard. I told him I don’t believe him. I told him it was wrong to steal. “If you do it again, I’ll kill you.”
“It’s more wrong to murder someone, you know. Compared to stealing, I mean.”
Huh. Such a philosopher, Benny is. I cannot believe how a pain he can be sometimes. He is not my friend, but somehow our circumstances have always forced us to be together. I guess he is the closest I could have of a friend.
Getting me out of my reverie, Benny started to talk. “There’s no sound. It’s so quiet here. It feels like we’re the only people in the world right now.”
I nodded. He was right. Then I said. “It’s like we own the world.”
Then suddenly we heard this loud beeping noise. We climbed the fence and saw Joey. “Come on guys! Let’s go somewhere. I found a treasure!”
“What are you blabbering about Joey? What treasure? And where did you get that car?”
“Oh, this? It was just an old piece of junk I found by my uncle’s garage.” He grinned devilishly. Oh no. Not another stealing friend. Just my luck. The fellows I hang out with have the blood of thieves.
“I’ll tell you the secret.” He said again.
“I honestly don’t want to know.” I interrupted before he even continued.
“Hey, whatever you want. But you’re going with us to see the treasure, aren’t you?”
“I don’t think I have a choice. I need to keep you guys from getting into more trouble.”
Benny and Joey grinned together.
Benny and I jumped over the fence and then jumped again to get into Joey’s car. We drove for about five minutes before we reached an alley.
“The treasure is here.” Joey whispered. As if anyone could hear us. It was totally desolated.
We got out of the car and Joey led us into a corridor where there was a box. Joey pointed at the envelope perched on top. “Look! Read it.”
It was handwritten. The letter was from his father. Basically, his father was telling him how proud he is of Joey. Personally, I don’t see how, but okay. It was all emotional so I just skimmed through it. But when I reached the second page, a $100 bill fell on my lap.
“That’s the treasure. Well, and the letter. I never really got to know my dad, you know.” Joey said, almost tearful.
“So what do you want to do with it?” Benny asked.
“You’ll find out.”
We drove again and we stopped in front of a Halloween place called Dr. Frankenstein’s Laboratory. Joey bought three tickets.
“Welcome to Dr. Frankenstein’s Laboratory.” A voice said when we crossed the threshold.
It was dark and eerie inside. There were bottles of harmless, I’m assuming, chemicals. We spent the rest the day there.
Frankly, I had a lot of fun. I realized that Benny and Joey were fun to be around with. I never really appreciated their company before.
That night, before I closed my eyes to sleep, I decided that Benny and Joey were my friends after all.

[elaineavila991]

I really like your story!!!!!!!You have good imagination.

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I really like your story!!!!!!!You have good imagination.

Thanks Elaine I'm very glad you liked my story. I posted a few others too.

[reso636]

I do like this story! However, it is pretty choppy. Try combining some of your sentences together or making them lengthier. Other then that, I enjoyed it! I would love reading a novel about these three!

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I do like this story! However, it is pretty choppy. Try combining some of your sentences together or making them lengthier. Other then that, I enjoyed it! I would love reading a novel about these three!

I appreciate the great feedback and am certainly flattered that you liked my characters.