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Well, I have it on good authority that Paul and his girlfriend married and Father McKensie gave them Eleanore's headstone as a wedding present. After all, fair is fair.ladywithglasses wrote:I really liked this story. I enjoyed how Paul had such an upbeat and caring nature. You kept him really genuine to see his girlfriend. His heart shows through! I was wondering if he was going to choose to put the flowers on the grave or give them to his girlfriend. I sort of felt this moral dilemma. Putting the flowers on the grave would be socially correct but who would enjoy them? By another token giving them to his girl would be great since that was their original intention but overall I liked it. I felt that the priest and Paul left on great terms and they will see each other again some day!
Just kidding of course.
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Did the ending make sense to you? The name on the headstone, I mean?Christina O Phillips wrote:You have a way with descriptions so I can picture everything clearly in my head. I like the accents, too. But it does not feel finished. It feels like a piece of a scene or the start to a longer story.
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Thank you @Amagine. Your kind words have given me a lift. I am always surprised and flattered to learn that anyone likes something I've written. I would probably make a very bad teacher of writing because I do not employ any rules therefore there is no consistency in my writing other than a penchant for including twist endings. The only tip I can give is just to write what you feel that you yourself would like to read. Some people will relate and how nice it is when you find someone like this for you have, in effect, found a kindred spirit.Amagine wrote:I was drawn to this simply by the title and when I read your story, I was drawn in even more. This was wonderfully written. It's a story that can have an emotional impact (in a good way) on its readers. I need to get tips from you in writing short stories! It's a form that I want to learn someday.
Once again, thank you so much for your encouraging post.
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Thank you for the tip! Also, I don't think you would be a bad teacher at all! You could teach aspiring writers that inconsistency can be the key to writing something you'll be proud of. Don't follow a strict formula...write whatever you want!DATo wrote:Thank you @Amagine. Your kind words have given me a lift. I am always surprised and flattered to learn that anyone likes something I've written. I would probably make a very bad teacher of writing because I do not employ any rules therefore there is no consistency in my writing other than a penchant for including twist endings. The only tip I can give is just to write what you feel that you yourself would like to read. Some people will relate and how nice it is when you find someone like this for you have, in effect, found a kindred spirit.Amagine wrote:I was drawn to this simply by the title and when I read your story, I was drawn in even more. This was wonderfully written. It's a story that can have an emotional impact (in a good way) on its readers. I need to get tips from you in writing short stories! It's a form that I want to learn someday.
Once again, thank you so much for your encouraging post.
Thanks for the great advice!
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