MY GREAT WOMAN

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PAMELA MUGENI
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MY GREAT WOMAN

Post by PAMELA MUGENI »

THE GREAT WOMAN
She is always punctual in everything. Hardly complains unless with a genuine reason. By the time other women are stranded wondering where to start from tackling their daily activities. She is already moved ahead to the next topic. She is a housewife career woman mother aunt a good wife at the same time.
She is somebody comfortable to be around with. She can give you an idea. And always ready to listen and give her opinion wisely. She doesn't go around spewing your problems to every Tom Dick and Harry. Instead offers solutions. Because she's always busy inventing and investing. She has lots of money. But regards this as nothing. Her priority in life is helping others grow. In fact her goal in life is growing others achieve their goals. On the way when she encounters idle women engaged in foolish talk and argument gossiping about everything and everybody. My great woman has no time to waste. The reason why I always call her my great woman.
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Post by Brigitta Hegyi »

The woman in your description is great, I wonder if men appreciate women like these? I hope the answer is yes.
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Post by Aashiya Ashok »

The short story " My Great Woman"as mentioned in the site actually didn't give a feeling of story. It is just a description about a woman who the author admires.

There seem to be two names for the story " My great woman" and "The great woman ". There lacks punctuation marks and grammatical seems boring.

I strongly feels it need to be rewritten.
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Post by Christal Merkey »

I strongly agree with Aashiya. There are so many grammatical errors here that I couldn't even grasp the story. One of them was this,

"In fact her goal in life is growing others achieve their goals."

I'm not trying to be rude and judgmental, but how does someone grow others achieve their goals? See what I'm saying? 'Help' would be the better word. :-)
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