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The mouse evaded the starving cat.

This could be a writing prompt. Nice. You have created images in my head with six words. Bravo!

CambaReviewer wrote: ↑04 Apr 2018, 12:15 This could be a writing prompt. Nice. You have created images in my head with six words. Bravo!

Thanks! I love working with super short stories like this, I find it helps writers of all experience levels realize how little is truly necessary to make a good story

The girls played ball outside together.

Heart races, panting breath, quiet body.

Innovative. keep it up.

It reminds me of a "Haiku".
If you don't know, 'Haiku' is a traditional Japanese poetry form.
Haiku consist of 17 letters (characters) in three phrases of 5, 7, and 5 letters on each line.

Example: (Japanese)
fu-ru-i-ke ya (5)
ka-wa-zu to-bi-ko-mu (7)
mi-zu-no-o-to (5)

Translated in English:
old pond [5]
frog leaps in [7]
water's sound [5]

Haiku was the first poetry style to grab my interest as a student. I recall liking the idea that you told a very short story by capturing feelings and did not focus on rhyming.

Locked gazes, hands touching...cliff jumping

Running father, laughing mother, burning car

Nwa wrote: ↑05 May 2018, 09:59 Locked gazes, hands touching...cliff jumping

hahaha, that's a good one.

It reminds me Geena Davis and Susan Sarandon.

Spinning, shining, twirling
Bling is fantasy

Needle and bread. Just in time.

Soiled feet turn away
A full and empty lounge-room
Red slashes on walls

I went to hell, and back.

I came, I saw, I conquered.

Okay...that's NOT original.