He inspired Me

[Abigail09]

He inspired me..........
I watched him swim his heart out
At a point, when he had been in water for too long .
I wondered If he felt tired at all
I didn't stop there
I waited for him to come out
Expecting him to be so exhausted
To walk sluggishly
But his face shone like he had just been mesmerized by something
Then it occurred to me
He just finished doing something that makes him happy .
Sometimes that's all it takes to feel alive again
Doing something that makes us Happy
Feeding the soul .......

[R-Myra]

He inspired me..........
I watched him swim his heart out
At a point, when he had been in water for too long .
I wondered If he felt tired at all
I didn't stop there
I waited for him to come out
Expecting him to be so exhausted
To walk sluggishly
But his face shone like he had just been mesmerized by something
Then it occurred to me
He just finished doing something that makes him happy .
Sometimes that's all it takes to feel alive again
Doing something that makes us Happy
Feeding the soul .......

This post is so beautiful. Is this your own creation? Because it's really deep. It touched my heart. It has simple words but very effective.

[Abigail09]

Thank you . Yes I created the write-up

[crediblereading2]

This is beautiful and touching.

[Yazhini]

woah! this is amazing..Keep it up

[palilogy]

"then it occurred to me" is a great line - i would consider your greatest line in comparison to the entirety of the poem and consider what else can be edited, removed or rearranged to create a poem that is as good as your greatest line.

[Abigail09]

Thank you

[Andrew380]

This is epic.
"Doing things that makes us happy"
That's one of the keys to success in life

[Abigail09]

[Nidhi16]

Very heart touching...touched my heart. ♥

[Zora C Penter]

So many beautiful layers! Doing what you love is the greatest goal.

[imSunshine]

i can feel your emotions floating..thanks for sharing