Love Sonnet 212

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Love Sonnet 212

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Did Happiness leave with the revelries?
Or with the reasons to indulge in one?
The smiles stamped on my face are forgeries,
As nothing genuine have I now done;
You've gone, too far, none of my thoughts have reached,
And came back once, but only passing through,
For ever since the love, its binds were breached,
Goodbye has made you grace my dreams for show;
Your essence dwelt not in the substance shown,
Like foliage that's without the rosy blooms,
Or royalty stripped of the kingly throne,
If not like ambiance of empty rooms;
…..The world is round, the farther you depart,
…..You'll come around, so near, back to the start.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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Congratulations! It's a lovely sonnet. I would spare my use of ellipses a bit, but other than that, it's a beautiful poem.
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beccabecky wrote: 29 May 2019, 11:27 Congratulations! It's a lovely sonnet. I would spare my use of ellipses a bit, but other than that, it's a beautiful poem.
Thank you for visiting. And thank you for your advice. I will remember that.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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Oh dear. This made me sad but in a beautiful way.
"...while a book has got to be worthwhile from the point of view of the reader it's got to be worthwhile from the point of view of the writer as well." - Terry Pratchett on The Last Continent and his writing.
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Nisha Ward wrote: 30 May 2019, 04:43 Oh dear. This made me sad but in a beautiful way.
Thanks for visiting. So, that confirms it, there is beauty in sadness. I used to think that there is only such a thing as "sweet sorrow," Shakespeare being the promoter of which idea.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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