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thisgirl818
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I looked at you
Then I looked outside in the rain
And I've never felt so sad in my life
Than this moment

Everything is gray
And at the same time vividly colorful
It's funny how a little rain could emphasize
Such colors of the world

I looked at you once again
This time it's very clear beacuse I knew
I instantly knew
That I'm no longer in love with you
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That's sad😭
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What a wonderful poem. So sombre, you cultivated a moving atmosphere in very few lines. I could tell it would be about loss or love, even so I felt the last line very much.
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