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Penny for your thoughts,
Than a dime, I wish I had.
Your thoughts I forever sought,
Yet never emerge with a single one.

Penny for your thoughts,
Give me a quarter, I'll spend it well,
And I'll find the thoughts for which I sought,
And search for the smile at which I fell.

Penny for your thoughts,
Then the lottery I wish I'd won.
I'd pay it all for the heart for which I sought,
So that my soul could finally live on.
"Even the smallest person can change the course of the future." - Galadriel
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I see you experimented with philosophical quatrains. You need an ending couplet to turn it into a sonnet.
Stay safe.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: 06 Jun 2020, 18:49 I see you experimented with philosophical quatrains. You need an ending couplet to turn it into a sonnet.
Stay safe.
Sorry if this is extremely amateur, but what do you mean? Why would adding an ending couplet make it a sonnet?
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ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: 06 Jun 2020, 18:49 I see you experimented with philosophical quatrains. You need an ending couplet to turn it into a sonnet.
Stay safe.
Do the quatrains work? Or is it just off target?

Thank you, stay safe, too!
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Samwisekoop wrote: 07 Jun 2020, 19:32
ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: 06 Jun 2020, 18:49 I see you experimented with philosophical quatrains. You need an ending couplet to turn it into a sonnet.
Stay safe.
Sorry if this is extremely amateur, but what do you mean? Why would adding an ending couplet make it a sonnet?
A couplet is a requirement to finish off the sonnet. That makes the number of lines 14 in all, as prescribed. And yes, you also need some "conflict" or an " argument" in the 9th line or thereabouts for the "volta" that is also prescribed by the Shakespearean, Spenserian, or Petrarchan sonnet, whichever type you choose. (I am mainly a Shakespearean addict).
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ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: 07 Jun 2020, 20:37
Samwisekoop wrote: 07 Jun 2020, 19:32
ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: 06 Jun 2020, 18:49 I see you experimented with philosophical quatrains. You need an ending couplet to turn it into a sonnet.
Stay safe.
Sorry if this is extremely amateur, but what do you mean? Why would adding an ending couplet make it a sonnet?
A couplet is a requirement to finish off the sonnet. That makes the number of lines 14 in all, as prescribed. And yes, you also need some "conflict" or an " argument" in the 9th line or thereabouts for the "volta" that is also prescribed by the Shakespearean, Spenserian, or Petrarchan sonnet, whichever type you choose. (I am mainly a Shakespearean addict).
Oh, okay, thanks! I wasn't sure how to do that, now I do. You learn something new every day! However, I don't ALWAYS like to put "rules" on my poetry! Nonetheless, thank you for the advice and guidance! :D
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