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Amalia Lantano
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Your smile starts to fade
When fate is made
Reminiscing past trades
Some things left unsaid

Tried to hide the pain inside
No choice but his side
No come to aid
Decades of services made

Tears starts to flow
Loneliness starts to blow
Time to accept what is known
Final candles are blown
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So heartbreaking. Your words dont relay details but the form in which you put them together tells the story itself.
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Bburns3706 wrote: ↑08 Nov 2020, 18:17 So heartbreaking. Your words dont relay details but the form in which you put them together tells the story itself.
Thank you for appreciating my work. It means a lot to me.
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I have really enjoyed reading your poem. It captures the essence of final goodbyes so well.
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I love your poem, it's a great piece.
Harmony in chaos. It's all a matter of perspective.
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You have tried using rhyme but in s2l2 you kinda messed the rhyme scheme.
Harmony in chaos. It's all a matter of perspective.
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Bburns3706 wrote: ↑08 Nov 2020, 18:17 So heartbreaking. Your words dont relay details but the form in which you put them together tells the story itself.
I agree, the poem is great.
Harmony in chaos. It's all a matter of perspective.
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