Show me your naked pain

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Dominique M 5
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Love this! I feel with how big social media is a part of our lives that we hide behind a mask most of the time. You are daring us to step out and just be who we are. Not what is popular or what others want us to be. Felt it right here <3 (Old school heart, never forget the classics!) :D
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Post by Primrose Mhlanga »

This is very touching! What a nice piece Scott. Loved it.
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Post by Robert Potter »

I love the poem, especially the last stanza.

"Be here in our now
Be untethered, free
Be you
With me"

Living in the moment is something I need to get better at.
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Very inspiring and very touching. I absolutely love it. Thanks for sharing it with us.
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Post by Lopee »

I love this poem especially the first stanza
Show me your naked pain like don't hide anything from me, let me know all you're going through, ready to share the pains with you... I wish to write a short story on it..Scott Hughes on this one👍 Bravo!
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Hi, I was wondering when will the competition related to this poem end?
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Thanks alot sir for this beautiful art.
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The flow is simultaneous
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Post by Fanuza Tsybulyak »

lovely poem!! can't wait to make a drawing for this for the competition:)
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Post by Joshua Hartzler »

As “The Duke of Artz” this is a triple great Great GREAT poet. 👏👏👏
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Heartwarmingly beautiful :)
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Short and precise
Makes me feel the depth of what are yet to be told....
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Plagues of Pain

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My heart bleeds!
Silence over the web of pain
What thus plagues the pain of man?

For the sorrows to come
What else might I overcome in its agony?

Beseech not immortal peace in thy little hope of mortality rest!

O Nature show me thy naked pain!
Time, like an ever-rolling stream
Blows the agony of pain away.
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Post by jessiewinterspring »

Wow, romantic and tear-inducing beautiful <3
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Post by Jibrel Kiyar »

You're poet is very interesting you should write more of
this poet.
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