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the sky fell on the day you left me there
I was soaked with rain and despair
I felt the colours start to dull
As everything that was once ours
Is now just a memory of mine
I crossed the busy streets
With a lonely hand
that was once held by yours
Remember when you used to be my umbrella?
I told you, I didn't need shelter from the rain
But your warmth was so addictive
That I forgot myself
I started to make a life around the warmth you gave
Foolishly believing, helplessly wishing that this is it
A home.
But the tides change
And now you are no longer mine
My legs gave up as I passed our house
I sunk on the muddy ground with desperate angry tears
My heart couldn't take your last goodbye.
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I like this one :).
I felt the mud squish beneath my knees and in-between my fingers and toes.
Thank you :)
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Post by Junior Jackson »

The pain was tangible in this...maybe because I've been there. Haven't most of us? :(

Thank you for sharing!
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