Never could come up with a decent title
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Never could come up with a decent title
My pulse begins to slow
You see me close my eyes
And everything seems to ebb and flow
The darkness has come
To take me away
Please don't cry
For I'll be okay
The time has come
For me to go
It won't be painful
It won't be slow
So dry your eyes
Watch the fireflies
Think of my spirit
As it slowly begins to rise
Above the clouds
Above the skies
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This theme obviously concerns an impending physical death but with a little tweaking you could leave the subject a bit ambiguous to suggest simply leaving the person to which the narrator addresses his/her words. This would add a little mystery to the theme which could then be interpreted either way.
Thanks for sharing!!! [:- )
― Steven Wright
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Farewell flight.
Those are the two I thought of when reading your poem.
“there have been so many times
i have seen a man wanting to weep
but
instead
beat his heart until it was unconscious.
-masculine”
― Nayyirah Waheed
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