Apostasy

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romymaria
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Apostasy

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Since the night we have shared
a bed, I’ve tried to coalesce our bodies
but somewhere,
a circuit went wrong in you.

I kiss your freckles until they
melt, and I wonder if I am
your Talisman.
I wonder if you defined apostasy,
because since I fell into you,
I’ve abandoned everything.

I used to dwell in graveyards,
looking for a boy like you,
a man who resembles a burning
home that I want to live in.
Let your caved ceilings burrow
me, your rubble engulf me.

Let me swim in the terror that
is you. I think I smelled the sin
on you, somewhere in between
the rise and fall of your spine
as you slept. That night, I prayed
until my knees were bruised.

Today, my body is blue with
loving you and I am peeling
my skin like an onion, I am
offering you my nectar
heart. Palms open, I long
to throw myself into this
ephemeral love.

Smoke me like your favorite
cigarette, whisper to
me until I am ash falling at your
feet.

My bedroom has morphed
into something cosmic;
otherworldly – full. We live
here in the quiet spaces
between the turning hands
of the clock.
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DarkestbeforeDawn
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This is a very thoughtful and charming love story. It kind of seems like their love is a little unconventional, but I personally believe that there is a different definition of love for every person, including the speaker.
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This poem evokes incredible feelings in me, i think we all have experienced something or someone who redefines what we thought the world was. Everything about this poem is beautiful, from it's name, it's languid style, it's rich language to it's touching contrast between domination and submission. We all need to worship something, even if it is wrong.
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