Loneliness & Pain

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Loneliness & Pain

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Loneliness & Pain

Loneliness, how do you explain it? You could be surrounded by a billion people, but you fell alone.
Hurting, funny thing I found out is, it demands to be felt, it screams in your ear, the more you try to get rid of it the more you feel it.
But there is hope, the only thing that fights loneliness and pain.
So, don’t ever, ever lose hope because it will be the only thing that keeps you sane and alive.
It will guide you through the dark paths of your life.
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angelikauecker wrote:Loneliness & Pain

Loneliness, how do you explain it? You could be surrounded by a billion people, but you fell alone.
Hurting, funny thing I found out is, it demands to be felt, it screams in your ear, the more you try to get rid of it the more you feel it.
But there is hope, the only thing that fights loneliness and pain.
So, don’t ever, ever lose hope because it will be the only thing that keeps you sane and alive.
It will guide you through the dark paths of your life.

Very nice poetry.

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I think the concept of this poem is wonderful but there are definitely a couple things that could be fixed. Like where you meant to say feel but accidentally said fell. Otherwise, this is pretty good and kind of reminds me of The Fault In Our Stars with the whole "pain demands to be felt" thing.
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