Chasing Shadows

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Hannah Marie
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Chasing Shadows

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finding you is
chasing shadows
straight into the sidewalk

your chalky features
blur in black
and blue secret cracks

I thought a gasp
slipped from your silhouette
to beg my dreams to stay

till dawn, I heard only
windy wishes,
also out of reach
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Post by Wasif Ahmed »

Good poem Hannah!!
When people say you've changed, it just means that you have stopped living your life, their way.
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I like what the poem has to say and how it says it. I especially like the alliteration which seemed appropriately phrased to the context and not forced. Well done!
“I just got out of the hospital. I was in a speed reading accident. I hit a book mark and flew across the room.”
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Thank you!
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