Epitaph

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ANDREW MBAGO
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Epitaph

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While life is such a painful experience
Death is such a sorrowful escape.
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Post by helenejike »

Honestly, these two lines captures the dilemma my mind is always pondering. Short and deep.
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Post by ANDREW MBAGO »

Thank you helenejike for your reply.I wrote the poem based on the problems people face in life.Sometimes,problems may make people think of seeking refuge in death and that's why some would opt to commit suicide.However,death as an escape from world's problems, brings sorrow.This can be inscribed at a tomb of a loved one for remembrance.

Thank you and keep reading!
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Brief but deep. Great poem!
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Thank you Jaime Lync for your thoughts and comments.

Keep reading and Writing!
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Hits close to home. My Grandmother died this January and it still feels like yesterday. It still brings to thought that the sadness in death is preferable to the pain you live with. But it is not the sadness you have to deal with in ones own death, but everyone else around you that then in turn must suffer both.
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Post by Solja »

wow..so great
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Post by Sohinee Dey »

Just two lines but in two lines you expressed the emotions that were brewing inside you and I found it relatable.
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Post by ANDREW MBAGO »

Thank you Asile for reading the poem.Both your comments and feelings are highly valued.I am delighted that the poem has brought to memory your grandmother who died in January and it made you think your grandma died yesterday.Sorry for the loss but I hope you treasure the wisdom of age you inherited from her.

Many thanks and keep reading!

-- 04 Jul 2017, 06:13 --

Sohinee Dey,i am happy for taking your valuable time to read the poem.Thank you for your feelings.

Keep reading!

-- 04 Jul 2017, 06:16 --

Solja,wow..... wonderful!

Keep reading!
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Post by sophiemer642 »

Those two stanzas are short, but they say a lot. Suicide is a real problem in this world, and many believe that it's the answer to life's problems. Yes, this world is full of hardships and pain, but suicide is such a terrible way to end it.

-- 04 Jul 2017, 18:26 --

By the way, this was very well written. Nice example of quality is better than quantity.
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Post by ANDREW MBAGO »

Sophiemer,thank you for sharing your thoughts and feelings on the poem.I concur with you that during one's lifetime,one may face numerous challenges,pain and hardships that may push one to the wall of despair,hopelessness and gnawing of teeth.However,death as escape from these challenges and hardships brings sorrow to all of us.

Keep reading!
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