Vivian

Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.
Post Reply
User avatar
geoffrey ngoima
Posts: 777
Joined: 11 Jul 2017, 06:41
Bookshelf Size: 110
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-geoffrey-ngoima.html
Latest Review: "The Little Girl Inside Owning My Role in My Own Pain" by Tonya Barbee
Reading Device: B00UB76290

Vivian

Post by geoffrey ngoima »

(14-2-2015)



Vivian, your name
Is a sigh,
Vivian, your name
Is
A tombstone of
Names, and

By and by
Your name without an
End

Became, when
Your name became an
End.



~GNN
To posit that the war brings us closer to faith is a sleight of hand that makes fools of us all. "There Are Only Atheists in Fox Holes"~ Michael Carson
Latest Review: "The Little Girl Inside Owning My Role in My Own Pain" by Tonya Barbee
Vivian Paschal
Posts: 258
Joined: 05 Jan 2017, 02:04
Favorite Author: John Grisham
Currently Reading: Southern Cross
Bookshelf Size: 41
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-vivian-paschal.html
Latest Review: What is priest Nation, The Seed, and the H5G by Herbert Scholes
fav_author_id: 2455

Post by Vivian Paschal »

I must confess, I don't really understand this poem, but I do like the end. Plus, I like that it features my name :D
User avatar
geoffrey ngoima
Posts: 777
Joined: 11 Jul 2017, 06:41
Bookshelf Size: 110
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-geoffrey-ngoima.html
Latest Review: "The Little Girl Inside Owning My Role in My Own Pain" by Tonya Barbee
Reading Device: B00UB76290

Post by geoffrey ngoima »

Vivian Paschal wrote:I must confess, I don't really understand this poem, but I do like the end. Plus, I like that it features my name :D
Lol, Okay, the first letters of the poem read, Vivian, Bye Bye.

I wrote this poem many years ago; Vivian was my first love and I can't say it was a mutual feeling of love that we shared. I dragged out the sick relationship for years,... Anyway, she was my first muse, and when I say her name is tombstone of names, I mean the memory of her, what I felt, had killed every relationship/thing that I had since her, including myself. The second and third stanza say what I found out; that if I wanted to get over the feelings I had, I had to try not forget her and own everything that was, that is, and to always have a special place for her in my heart or head or whatever.
Anyway, John Grisham is your fav author? I loved that guy. I think I've read almost all his books. I think I said sth about him in my first review.
To posit that the war brings us closer to faith is a sleight of hand that makes fools of us all. "There Are Only Atheists in Fox Holes"~ Michael Carson
Latest Review: "The Little Girl Inside Owning My Role in My Own Pain" by Tonya Barbee
Post Reply

Return to “Creative Original Works: Poetry”