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Summer blackened into silver charcoal
Molten glass at the watering hole
The sky has never been so true
And then there was you, me and you.

Apples are red and the grass so green
Dew on daises is rarely seen
A laugh from a child filled with pure delight
And then there was you, me and you that night

I can feel the wind rushing through my veins
I walk a hundred miles in the pouring rain
The thunder cracks straight through my brain
You fill me with sun my love wont wane

Wishing on a star first seen in the sky
An elephant watching as the world passes by
The earth is seen from space as blue
And then there was you, me and you

Astroids shower in shooting star skies
The great living circle lives and dies
Water smoothes down a mountains height
And then there was you, there was us so right

I can feel the wind rushing througn my veins
I walk a hundred miles in the pouring rain
The thunder cracks straight to my brain
You fill me with sun my love wont wane

This poem was extremely well written! a very good job!

I really like all of the detailed description

1. The rhymes are skillful and the rhythm is solid
2. "You fill me with sun my love won't wane" is the best usage of alliteration I have seen in a while.
Overall, it is very lovely.