A DAY...long after.

[Lurking Writer]

A day
Will arrive when i
Will gaze at a random tree.

In a way,
Not to enquire why,
In wonder of her being so free.

A girl who will be playing thereby,
On my look shall turn to enquire me,
That what is so surprising 'bout the same?

Is it 'bout the flowers that you need to apply?
Or you need the honey from the house of bee?
I will close my lids seeing that which came...

The trees which stood not so cared,
The bellies which then wandered shun,
The streets when moved but not were shared,
The humankind forgot all pun!

[Samwisekoop]

This is really good! Although, the meaning is a little foggy...did you mean for the meaning to be indistinct? Also, you followed a rhyming pattern, but then it kinda got lost in the third verse. Now, I am not saying these things are wrong with your poem because I personally like non-fluent poems. They are very striking. For these reasons, I liked your poem very much! I just want to know if these things are intentional or if you weren't trying to do this. Overall, good job!