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Hourglass
Posted: 25 May 2020, 12:16
by Samwisekoop
I will not be an hourglass
Buried beneath the sands of time.
Falling and forgotten.
A drifting grain of sand.
Used and reused,
Drained and stretched within the rhyme.
Re: Hourglass
Posted: 27 May 2020, 18:21
by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes
There is an interesting metaphor. You conveyed something deep about the allusion to being left buried in the sands of time, of being used and reused. And it is understandable for anyone to despise being stretched to the limits, and being bored or tired of all these. You should write more.
Re: Hourglass
Posted: 27 May 2020, 20:26
by Samwisekoop
Thank you! I definitely am glad that that metaphor is conveyed. I will consider writing more..but either it comes or it doesn't. It is never good if I force it! Haha! Thanks for leaving a comment!
Re: Hourglass
Posted: 29 May 2020, 12:22
by Sumansona1344
Samwisekoop wrote: ↑25 May 2020, 12:16
I will not be an hourglass
Buried beneath the sands of time.
Falling and forgotten.
A drifting grain of sand.
Used and reused,
Drained and stretched within the rhyme.
It is so good and relatable. It is heart touching and deep at the same time. Can I ask something? What was your inspiration or is it something particular that makes you feel this way?
Re: Hourglass
Posted: 29 May 2020, 12:28
by Samwisekoop
Well...this is quite the train ride, so buckle up! First, I had just seen Disney's Aladdin and the part when Jasmine got stuck in the hourglass just stuck in my head. But, this directly isn't where this poem came from. The thing is is that I want to make a difference in this world. If not for humanity, then for one person who needs it. I don't want to be another person who just hides away and lives their lives for themselves. Looking out for their comfort and crawling away to lick their wounds when they get hurt. I have always felt this way and I still do. I was thinking about this one night...then two and two came together. In my brain, I saw that an hourglass is a perfect example of what I DON'T want to be! So, I wrote it down really quickly so I didn't forget. But, my poems sometimes come out of now where...Haha! Thank you for dropping by to comment!
Re: Hourglass
Posted: 29 May 2020, 12:31
by Samwisekoop
@Sumansona1344 344, forgot to quote you...haha!
Re: Hourglass
Posted: 29 May 2020, 12:36
by Sumansona1344
Samwisekoop wrote: ↑29 May 2020, 12:28
Well...this is quite the train ride, so buckle up! First, I had just seen Disney's Aladdin and the part when Jasmine got stuck in the hourglass just stuck in my head. But, this directly isn't where this poem came from. The thing is is that I want to make a difference in this world. If not for humanity, then for one person who needs it. I don't want to be another person who just hides away and lives their lives for themselves. Looking out for their comfort and crawling away to lick their wounds when they get hurt. I have always felt this way and I still do. I was thinking about this one night...then two and two came together. In my brain, I saw that an hourglass is a perfect example of what I DON'T want to be! So, I wrote it down really quickly so I didn't forget. But, my poems sometimes come out of now where...Haha! Thank you for dropping by to comment!
That's perfect! You are the first person I found who thinks like me. I also want to make a difference in this world. I want to help people and make everyone realise that even if this world is a bad place, there is someone who is good who is going to be there for you. I know how being helpless and stuck feels. I have been in this state since I was a kid. In short, I have a toxic family and I live in a country which is unsafe. Keeping this short, I really know what you want everyone to know through your poetry.
Re: Hourglass
Posted: 29 May 2020, 12:48
by Samwisekoop
Really?! That's awesome!! It is hard to find like-minded people in this world! Anne from Anne of Green Gables would call us "kindred spirits". I am so sorry that you are in difficult situations! I'll be praying for you! I am glad that you understand how I feel and how I felt when I wrote this poem. Thank you!
Re: Hourglass
Posted: 29 May 2020, 13:40
by Sumansona1344
Samwisekoop wrote: ↑29 May 2020, 12:48
Really?! That's awesome!! It is hard to find like-minded people in this world! Anne from Anne of Green Gables would call us "kindred spirits". I am so sorry that you are in difficult situations! I'll be praying for you! I am glad that you understand how I feel and how I felt when I wrote this poem. Thank you!
Yeah, you are right. It's okay now. I am trying to accept the fact that I am strong but it still hurts sometimes. I really do!
Thank you so much!
Re: Hourglass
Posted: 29 May 2020, 20:14
by Samwisekoop
I bet it hurts! You are strong! Don't forget it!