I'm in Pain Mentally.

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I'm in Pain Mentally.

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At the first breath of dawn, I dabble my face in cold water.
What a perfect feeling!
I pacify with my inner atrocities.
It's a new day to heal from the battle wounds.

The bird that charms my morning sang before I became gracious of the opportunity.
A letter written in fading ink bearing a permanent message of a suitor is folded and stored.

I'm always pacey to give in to her requests. We both bare bendlets of the truth, covered in untapped potential.
It's a love story lost in the hands of the storyteller.
I can't travel now, COVID-19 has robbed off my freedom.
She can't meet me physically I'm in pain mentally.
Discipline is the bridge between goals and accomplishment.
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"She can't meet me physically......menatlly" What a great ending to your poem!
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I love the flow and how well you've organized your thoughts.
"Regular reading improves your grammar."
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Sumansona1344 wrote: ↑29 May 2020, 14:06 "She can't meet me physically......menatlly" What a great ending to your poem!
Thank you.
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Great lines. The emotions beautifully blended with the words. It was a nice read. Thank you.
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