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Goodbyes

Posted: 12 Oct 2020, 18:13
by Amalia Lantano
Your smile starts to fade
When fate is made
Reminiscing past trades
Some things left unsaid

Tried to hide the pain inside
No choice but his side
No come to aid
Decades of services made

Tears starts to flow
Loneliness starts to blow
Time to accept what is known
Final candles are blown

Re: Goodbyes

Posted: 08 Nov 2020, 18:17
by Bburns3706
So heartbreaking. Your words dont relay details but the form in which you put them together tells the story itself.

Re: Goodbyes

Posted: 14 Nov 2020, 06:49
by Amalia Lantano
Bburns3706 wrote: 08 Nov 2020, 18:17 So heartbreaking. Your words dont relay details but the form in which you put them together tells the story itself.
Thank you for appreciating my work. It means a lot to me.

Re: Goodbyes

Posted: 15 Mar 2021, 11:30
by Petruschka1
I have really enjoyed reading your poem. It captures the essence of final goodbyes so well.

Re: Goodbyes

Posted: 19 Mar 2021, 02:51
by John Owen
I love your poem, it's a great piece.

Re: Goodbyes

Posted: 19 Mar 2021, 02:52
by John Owen
You have tried using rhyme but in s2l2 you kinda messed the rhyme scheme.

Re: Goodbyes

Posted: 19 Mar 2021, 02:53
by John Owen
Bburns3706 wrote: 08 Nov 2020, 18:17 So heartbreaking. Your words dont relay details but the form in which you put them together tells the story itself.
I agree, the poem is great.