What Grace Means to Me

Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.
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To be at war in the material world, without losing inner peace.
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Nice poem.
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To love and appreciate....
To choose to turn your life around before its too late....
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Post by Michael Williams 21 »

There's such a thin line that sometimes you may think you are one but other people see the other ..... The way you depicted balance is awe inspiring
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There's such a thin line that sometimes you may think you are one but other people see the other ..... The way you depicted balance is awe inspiring
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Post by Surabhi Rani »

'To be inspired but not restless.' I like these words best in your poem. I find them very relatable.
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Post by Leonie Vermaak »

I absolutely love this, it's thought-provoking and so true. It's hard to choose just one line, but the two that I truly like the most is:
"To love and forgive unconditionally, but only trust intelligently."

"To choose to turn your life around before it is too late and there is no life left to turn around."
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Post by Veky »

Here is an example of a contradiction:

"to be assertive vs to be rebellious" -- assertive usually means acting top-down, consistently and with clear rules. Rebellious is usually bottom-up, inspirational and in disdain of the rules.

"to rarely choose to do, but to do your best when you do" vs "to do, without trying" -- how do you know you're doing your best if you don't try to do better?

Here is an example of an unclarity:

"without becoming only human" -- I really can't see what this might mean. How does one become "only human"? As opposed to what?

Here is an example of a dangerous advice:

"to be at war in the material world" -- seriously, why? What horrible things has material world done?
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Post by Tina Sims 1 »

I love it. It really made me stop and think about what you were saying and what it meant especially in my own life.
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Post by Corie H »

I liked it was honest,it’s how everyone should go at at life always be true to ourselves to be rebellious and free but not tyrant,is one thing this world should really take in heart,mind and soul
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Post by SaundraTaylor T »

Reading the piece made me stop and reevaluate my values, ethics, and beliefs. Self reflective and inter-impection to evaluate where I am presently and where I have missed the mark. The poem made me re-align my inner self and reset the button of my value and belief systems. Additionally questioned who I currently am and who I desire to become
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Post by Agbata Precious 1 »

The second line is actually for me. That was my dad's best words. I must commend the poem but the 11th one was confusing to me. What a nice piece.
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Post by mechergui »

This piece is very motivating and inspiring to read. It is about self motivating and trusting your inner thoughts.
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Post by ROWENA MALLANAO »

"To be rebellious and free, but not a tyrant". Rebellious and free like my life.. I'm rebellious because I want to be free..
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Post by DATo »

I must have missed this when it was first posted.

Very nice and inspirational poem. Your addition of
"To make less commitments, and wholeheartedly keep the commitments you make."
is an important one and rounds the poem out beautifully.

This is the sort of thing one should print out and review from time to time for ourselves as well as to have on hand for those we meet who might benefit from its message.
“I just got out of the hospital. I was in a speed reading accident. I hit a book mark and flew across the room.”
― Steven Wright
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