Show me your naked pain

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Evelyn Kebadireng
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Post by Evelyn Kebadireng »

unmasked i be.Not cocooned.........inspired to throw away the blanket and show me to the world.
Beautiful piece
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Post by Sicelo Mabuza »

Wow this is good
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It was really nice.good job.
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Post by Karen Gurtiza »

"I'd rather have bad times with you..."
It's the song that popped up when I read the poem
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Post by Solomon Moses 2 »

Nice poem
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Post by Nazir Ahmad 4 »

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Post by Avid Reader318 »

This is beautiful. I'm crying. People don't want our true selves in general. Most of the word is fake with hollow words of "how are you". They want an automatic reply of "I'm great". I wish we could do away with the fake, but if you aren't smiling you are "too much". Great poem. <3
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Post by asimahmed »

naked to the pain
can't find no
shelter
nowhere to run
nowhere to hide
nobody knows
all the tears that
i have cried
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Post by SparkindaGl0 »

I feel you!
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Post by Musiitamartin »

I Love it .
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Post by Joseph Mukuma »

Superb writing
True poetic✊
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Post by Lea Moldovan 1 »

Beautiful. Simple yet has so much depth and meaning!
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Post by Le-nic Pretorius »

Beautiful words. If only we could be our true selves all the time.
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Beautiful and so vulnerable!
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Post by Catherine Lebogang Kelapile »

Beautiful message from the poem. Honesty and transparency really go a long way especially for networking and building relationships.
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