The Poised Architect

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Isabella Sya
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The Poised Architect

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The Poised Architect by Isabella Sya

Our thoughts shape
Reality
Solidifying space.

Though
Fragile is its beauty
Sacred
Is its art.

Such a poised architect
Is the mind;
Itself expressing
Greatest of hope sublime
In its search for
True Love:
Liberation.

So send forth in great warmth
Into the mental field
Our hearts.

Escape -
The flux of the transient.

As love's might protects,
Wisdom's light guides us
Into eternity.

To the deathless
I surrender my mind;
Come:
Electrify my reality.

(Nirvana)

*This poem was meant to be centered in alignment, but I'm uncertain how to go about that with the alignment using this textbox, so much apologies for the left-side alignment. Enjoy (...or not?)! (Please let me know your comments below - I appreciate your time viewing and potentially constructively criticizing the poem I wrote. Cheers.
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@Isabella Sya

Very nice poem! You have managed to elegantly "solidify" several tomes of historical, philosophical writings by some of the world's greatest philosophers into this beautiful architectural edifice.

If I may ask: what was the significance of your plan to center the text? I am intuiting that it has something to do with the concept of geometric / and gravitational balance of a real architectural structure. I don't know if I am even close.

Thanks for posting!
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