Slightly Incoherent

[Hailey Michelle]

To l-o-o-k is hardly e’er to see
To learn is ne’er to know
I’d ask you to stay here with me
But then you’d surely go

To hear is not to listen
To touch is not to feel
It seems the stars do glisten
But that is hardly real

To think is rather thoughtless
To deny is to accept
She told me to be c a u t i o u s
That’s one promise that I’ve kept

These words aren’t very truthful
though I can’t say that I’ve lied
Our corrosive thoughts are mutual
and they’re freezing up the tide.

[CloudedRune]

Ooooh I like this a lot!

[s_curley]

Stunning!

[teacher_jane1]

I liked that you chose to rhyme this poem. It gave structure and consistency, which is a nice contract to the title and subject matter. If you'd used free verse I think this would have been too scattered, but your ABAB scheme is good! Nice job.

[johappy]

This is awesome because of the rhyme pattern. That makes poems so much more entertaining to read! Great job!

[Serena_Charlotte]

I'm very impressed at its depth and truthfulness. Great job!