Sweater Weather

Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.
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MnRen91
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Sweater Weather

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Stuck in the house
with no place to go.

If you were here
I wouldn't feel so alone.

But you chose to leave
I couldn't make you stay.

All I have of you is this sweater
and it's starting to fray.
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Saiili
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Post by Saiili »

The poetry is direct and easy to understand, however there is a lack of symbolism in there; there is only a few line where the readers can rethink and reflect.
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