Girl inside her - "song"?

[Adakage]

Well i wrote this song a while ago, i wasn't too bad at English, still i find it a bit lame. Anyways what do you think?
Lyrics:
Let me tell you a story
Of a girl who's close to me
I know she's not perfect
But I don't give a crap

She's just a little girl
In this crazy world
Even if many know
What's under her skirt...

Now you know her better
You can understand her
This is what she needs
From all the people

(SOLO)


Now you know her better
You can understand her
This is what she needs
From all the people

She loves those parties
The ones clearing her memories
Cuz' that's the only way
She can be who she is

Sometimes she's desperate
So she can't have a rest
She tries to hide her feelings
But I can see her suffering...


Now you know her better
You can understand her
This is what she needs
From all the people

We've recorded it with my "band", i can't post the link as my account is new but search for "Re-generáció - The girl inside Her" on youtube
Yes, it's lame, and the music isn't too good but at that moment it felt right for whom i wrote it

[Avishi]

I just now heard your song. It was nice. I am not professional singer to evaluate your song. But it's pretty nice and new to me to hear. Keep going. All the best.