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IRONY bY Ana kandwal

Posted: 31 May 2015, 17:56
by anakandwal+
On one side of the border, the man was hung.
They accused him of being a terrorist who killed the sons of the soil.
People celebrated the death and mothers smiled with teary eyes.
It was the celebration of Justice.
They raised the slogan- ‘Long live the Truth.’

On the other side of the border, the news of execution reached.
They praised him for being a martyr who saved the sons of the soil.
People celebrated the death and mothers smiled with teary eyes.
It was the celebration of Sacrifice.
They raised the slogan- ‘Long live the Truth.’

Re: IRONY bY Ana kandwal

Posted: 01 Jun 2015, 04:06
by DATo
In every conflict the combatants always believe that God is on their side. I think you captured the essence of this thought perfectly with your poem. Nicely written but I would change the first sentence of the second stanza to, News of the execution reached the other side of the border.

Though your poem definitely tells a "short story" I think it would be more properly represented in the Creative Original Works: Poetry section.

Re: IRONY bY Ana kandwal

Posted: 24 Jun 2015, 14:16
by anakandwal+
DATo wrote:In every conflict the combatants always believe that God is on their side. I think you captured the essence of this thought perfectly with your poem. Nicely written but I would change the first sentence of the second stanza to, News of the execution reached the other side of the border.

Though your poem definitely tells a "short story" I think it would be more properly represented in the Creative Original Works: Poetry section.
Thank you so much for your invaluable advice. I will modify this piece as you said, as it seems perfect. Also, many thanks for appreciating and understanding the deep image. :)

Re: IRONY bY Ana kandwal

Posted: 18 Aug 2015, 05:56
by stoppoppingtheP
wow, this poem, as short as it was, conveys such a deep imagery. How the exact same scenario is received totally differently.

Re: IRONY bY Ana kandwal

Posted: 28 Aug 2015, 11:41
by dziak01
Very touching!