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Day
Posted: 04 Nov 2015, 22:07
by stanley
Day
It was a green and a gold and a blue breezy,
Yeah, a jumpin' up and down day.
Birdful for chirpy and redful for roses,
All bee busy of buzzful
and all yeses for Hooray!
And all wine lazy of sunsetful
Yeah, a day
Re: Day
Posted: 05 Nov 2015, 07:30
by Fran
I like your poem especially "a jumpin' up and down day" - love that line.
Re: Day
Posted: 05 Nov 2015, 14:43
by stanley
Fran, thank you so much for your response to my little attempt at poetry. Do you do any writing yourself? I looked for something by you, but being new to the site, might have missed it.
Re: Day
Posted: 05 Nov 2015, 18:33
by DATo
I concur with Fran: it is a nice piece of writing which takes the play of metaphor down a new and exciting avenues. I enjoyed reading this very much and I hope you will post more of your work!
Re: Day
Posted: 05 Nov 2015, 20:58
by stanley
Thank you, DATo for your comments. I have just read your romance and my lunch remains in place. I thought it was a brave and interesting foray into a genre' new to you. Also read the cause and effect story and intend to reread it more carefully. Very interesting ideas and questions raised.
Re: Day
Posted: 06 Nov 2015, 07:03
by Fran
stanley wrote:Fran, thank you so much for your response to my little attempt at poetry. Do you do any writing yourself? I looked for something by you, but being new to the site, might have missed it.
@stanley
No I do not aspire to being a writer, apart from reviews that is, but I have huge admiration for both poets & authors.